All Comments on '...And Stay There!'

Well written and very funny too. A great story

Well planned, written and executed. Thanks.

Well written and very funny too. A great story

But I loved the story. The only palatable thing about cheating is great payback.

The NBA Draft only has two rounds since 1989 but it still was a great story!

Just enough humor and just the right amount of justice. Well done!

Thank you.

Good story. Well written and a good read. No wimps here.

Good Read.

I am glad you did not use a sewage truck, no need to ruin a classic. I am sure the water did enough damage. I liked the supportive relationship with his wife. She actually used her brain. It's good to have friends who will watch your back also. Good story.

It was nice symmetry with the use of the water truck instead of the sewage truck

Although I would have gone with raw sewage, or better yet, some kind of toxic nuclear waste. Ah well, great story none the less. Although aren't the bad guys (girls) supposed to drive Chevy's like all those "illegal" types?

I liked the method of revenge. I'm surprized that StangStar gave such a favorable response after you trashed a mustang. Ha Ha!

I prefer the revenge without violance and murder. This was that. 5 stars.

You hit all the elements with great balance. Ray was damned if he did and damned if he didn't. I like the way you had Jenny undercut Ray by her preemptive spin.

You never know who your real friends are until they show they are willing to do what it takes to help you. Jim and Ray both have great friends.

I especially like the symmetry of Ray's revenge without going totally over the top.

Looking forward to your next story.

The revenge was good, even at the expense of a Mustang.

Nice job, very entertaining read!

I'll go for some over the top stuff for revenge, but when you called Jenny, Wendy, I almost lost it.

Too bad the editing didn't catch that.

I only had to stop once.

The story was plausible and entertaining.

Please keep writing.

So many stories abound in this section of packs of conniving women giving the business to their men. It's refreshing to read a story finally with a "Fellowship" of friends returning the favor. The ladies just have no idea of the litmus of a real friendship in the same manner as us men. Just a guy thing I guess

One phrase sums up this excellent story, "bros before ho's!"

Not a great piece of writing but still entertaining. I wish more and better writers on Literotica would adopt a similar formula to this one. Too many LW stories are told from the husband or wife's perspective. Its a refreshing change to have a third party character's view of the cheater, taking sides and helping out with the payback.

they made me laugh, keep writing please!

It was bad enough that he assaulted a stranger but I stopped reading when the asshole went ballistic when she visited.

@ Dear Ms. Dwornock Nobody was violated only the true friendship worked in this story, the waterwork was made not wintertime so the humorous revenge was exactly in the right place in the story. You thinked in OHIO's story The "A Loving Wife Dies: Painful Truths" the betrayed husband's spit in his died wife's face is violance........

Can you differentiate the true violance from strong emotional or humor?

I am sorry Ohio's story the wife was dying and not dead! I mad mistake....

A "shit truck" would have been fun, Amigo! Real good story.

The story had emotion and description in ample quantity. The characters were well developed with very plausible actions interactions and behaviors. The story was very plausible and it emphasized the blindness and mental block one can endure while experience love. Jenny was a plausible character I have experienced persons possessing her qualities and the type of pain that can occur as a result to an innocent victim of her twisted sense of life. Fortunately, not many women are like Jenny and usually they don't get into relationships once their reputations precede them. The revenge was hollow but the reunification of friends was great. All in all, the discovery of a persons character or lack thereof is very influential to us all in establishing new relationships. I differ to agree with the theme that once a cheater always a cheater, it doesn't give room for redemption. I believe that you are the captain of your own destiny and you can and you will change when you feel a need. Poor Jenny may find someway to find her way to counseling and she might find her path if she believes enough in herself. As you can see, in my response this author is great at stirring emotion at least with me. When a story does that its more than great.Thanx author!

Excellent tale. It just proves the theory "Once a cheater, always a cheater." The revenge was great. No violence but tremendous humiliation for the slut. She will never cheat on a husband. She'll never get one. She is the perfect definition of a "cunt." Not a body part but a state of being. Fucking cunt.

OH YEAH

This is a fun tale with a lot of interesting details and a slut from Hell as the villainess!

The septic tank truck idea has been done before both in story and real life. The water truck was a nice alternative.

It's always good to she a lying, cheating slut get what's due her. And to laugh myself silly when she got hers? Priceless!

I think this story is the best Cruel Revenge story here on Lit.

And funny too -

Well done - she got what she deserved and yep we have all been there and got the t shirt -

Not a total BTB but very close

well written good flow to the story.

Most important of all - entertainment

Fulfilled for why I look and read - a GOOD STORY

Thank you for your effort and posting

Please keep writing and so I can keep reading!!

and will wash away your troubles and pain. NOT, TK U MLJ LV NV

I actually would of liked to see what you could've done with the sewage angle...lol

Although the water does tie in to the beginning better.

One more thing, I liked this better because both found out about her before marriage was an issue (at least with her...).

if jenny didnt stink up the story enough, that pun did the job.

I gave you a four. It would have been a five if you had used the septic tank truck. They would have had a hard time finding the piece of shit amongst all the other shit.

Flavian used the shit piss mixture in his story "Special Dee".

Yeah, my group of friends from high school and beyond, to this day 25 years later, pulled together for a few missions similar to this.It's funny when you're in your early twenties, a whole lot less funny when you are nearing forty. My best bud recovered recently from a cheatin wife, though his ex, and his ex bud, never recovered their dignity.

didn't learn and got a soaking while poking, TK U MLJ LV NV

But in my opinion you're not exclusive until you are engaged to be married, with a ring on her finger. This new idea of exclusive fornicaters is just so much bullshit! The mere fact that she would have sex before she was married, made her a slut. The guys are no better.

You are exclusive as soon as the two of you agree to be exclusive.

It is good that he found out before marrying her, no legal problem with simply dumping her.

No legal problem, no commitment, no vows to each other before God and friends, no marriage; just two shallow, selfish fornicaters pretending to be grown-ups until something better (yeah, the grass is always greener...) comes along. So sad, to never experience true, lasting love. I won't say it can't happen without marriage, but it sure wouldn't have worked out for me without it. I'm ashamed at how many times I'd have dumped her sorry ass if it wasn't for my wedding vows! Make no mistake, marriage is the hardest thing I've ever done. I was forced to grow up, be responsible, admit I was wrong and make compromises everyday of my life since "I do". My life before marriage was carefree and fun. After marriage, loads of worry and strife (mostly due to my kids) but mostly love, deep, enduring love tempered by 36 years of never giving up; meeting everything life throws at you together and eventually realizing that no matter what, you've got someone you can count on who loves you just as much as you love her, and everything pales next to that.

you are exclusive when you agree to be exclusive. Once you make that commitment you don't get a "do over" on your agreement. The engagement ring is just a force field generator and the wedding ring is the "dome". But agreeing to be mutually exclusive to others should be enforceable.

Not your best. It meandered at times.

While I see your point about her stinking up the story enough, I DO like the idea of a septic tank truck!

They always say the same things, like “It’s not what you think,” when it is obviously what they know!

And then they get all upset at the break up! If the relationship meant that much that they would break down at it’s ending, then they wouldn’t be cheating!

“One thing led to another and..." – I’m sorry, a few drinks with an old boyfriend doesn’t just “happen” to lead to fucking!

“I want you to know that I didn't mean for it to happen.” – How do you get fucked without “meaning for it to happen?”

“I had no idea that I hurt you so bad...” – Didn’t she think about how badly SHE would be hurt if it happened to her?

She SAYS she’s matured, then two minutes later she’s ready to cheat on Jim? And have Ray cheat on Catey?!

"You expect me to believe that, Ray?” - Yes, I expect you to believe your HUSBAND, as opposed to a woman you barely know, who admits to having cheated in the past! “Open Door Policy” or not!

Love the feeling of just rewards duly delivered.

Got put away wet...ha ha

Great story, but why not have them fill the car with the concrete from the truck?

Pretty good story for a Big 10 loser who is filled with irrational jealousy for the "ISU Redbirds" (I wonder if this is the first Big 10/Big 12 trash talk comment on Literotica?)

That was really well written and a very interesting story. Funny, funny, funny! I loved it!!! Agree with NOT going with the alternate ending. Read one that did though [worked for a honey pot emptying service], he filled the cheating guy's car to the door tops -- as it was a convertible -- while they were going at it in the house at 4AM. It was great as well. His cover story held water and he got away with it!!!

Still smiling at your story....

Cruel Revenge Story without murder and extreme violance, insted of these HUMOR!

Be sure your sins will find you out!

5 stars no further comment.

And Catey should trust her bf before some woman she just met

Dump the losers

....Of the water truck was perfect! No septic pumpout needed! ;-)

Thanks for a good laugh this afternoon....

A funny BTB, and a very good one too.

...can't believe Ray's wife would believe Jenny so easily after just meeting her. All worked out in the end. 5 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

Jenny was seven kinds of crazy but wtf with Catey not believing her husband about Jenny??? He was patient beyond belief convincing her of

His truthfulness. My reaction would have been if you believe that crazy bitch over me, we’re done. Have a good life-adios.

One of those super aggressive lying chicks whose defence is to make up the next lie. She keeps everyone on the edge.

Will read more

This guy did some really good stories, including this one. Great story.

...to read a BigK10 story.

He is like a handful (paltry few) of talented writers on Literotica who write so well, with such clever phraseology, and interesting ways of expressing themselves, that I want to read them no matter what they're writing about. The journey is so great, that, no matter what the destination, it's a good trip.

Makes me want to go on another jaunt with BigK10.

Paul in Oklahoma

The septic tank ending has been done. The symmetry of the two hosings was great

The water filling the car had to be written. Enjoyed the story but same reaction as last time. MC needs a new wife.

Ray''s marriage is weak. His wife was ready to believe someone she barely knew over her husband. Either Ray has done some shady things that his wife is suspicious or she has no trust in him.

Thank you for the wonderful funny story

Still LMAO! Great story!

Another read of this great story. They didn't burn the bitch, but they did half drown her.

The old mustang would not have started after being filled with water..... just sayin

It’s hard for me to believe it that Ray could go with a girl for 8 months and his best friend (like a bother) had ever met her or knew her name. Didn’t know she cheated on him or anything. That’s what friends are for, helping you get over a sorry bitch.

Okay, there are a lot of guys out there that don't know what cheating looks like, and love there woman so much it blinds them, at first. So it took Ray 8 months, is to catch her, and Jim still didn't see it until Ray dragged him to her. That's fair. They weren't cheaters, but you can bet they know what to look for now. By the way. That Mustang is a Ford. The water filled the inside, not the engine compartment, so it started up with no problem. Think about it! Well done. Good job. Keep writing.

XYZ

To 'Hard to believe '. Ray was a freshman in college when he met the slut. Jim was a senior in high school, miles a part. That why!. Ray never told Jim about Jen, he hadn't seen him yet.

XYZ

Excellent, well told story, sadly familiar tale of once a slut always a slut.

@sbrooks103

re: Further Thoughts,

How can ANYONE catch of all of those obvious points. Simply amazing. NOT!

Capt. Obvious strikes again.

Further Thoughts? I didn't see ANY other thoughts. BigK10 must have deleted them for you.

Good job and thank you BigK10, keep writing.

Like others, I have trouble understanding how Jim had never heard of Jenny's relationship with Ray despite going to the campus where they'd had their relationship the previous year and being such a close friend of Ray's. Further, I really disliked Catey's reaction after Ray told her what had happened. Something was really wrong with Ray's marriage.

Great story - very well paced and described. Very plausible plot. Good character development and excellent writing

You really shoulda used the "Honey Dipper truck " instead of the water truck!! Anyway, great story! The ending made it a FUN read@@

Great BTB story!5*