I'm enjoying this story & I can't wait to read more.
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Anonymous04/16/11
Thank you . . .
I only just found you, as it HAS been a year since your last offering. The story is, as said before, well written. As I am a sentimentalist, you have me enjoying your work. True love is propelling these two, as opposed to carnal or animalistic desire. There is still an innocence there, as well. Please keep up the good work. It is truly enjoyable. Also, I admire your open-mindedness with regard to some of the critiques.
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Anonymous06/27/11
good but
don't get lazy either finish it properly or delete the series never leave the readers hanging
A lovely, gentle erotic encounter.
I am more than happy to ignore their relationship in the light of such love.
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Anonymous12/17/12
total waste of time and space
no background an unrealistic rush to sex and no end add up to a waste of time. either delete and rewrite this adding the background and end using a good editor or just delete it. as is the series sucks and not in a good way it would have ben better if you had never posted at all rather than post less than half a story.
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Anonymous08/23/13
you just have to hate these trolls...
hey, anonymous commtn, let me tell you that you succeded: I'm mad. Why write such nonsense instead of doing something better with your life, nobody forced you to read this story if you don't like it -.-
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Anonymous08/27/13
Try reading all three parts
dumbass.
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Anonymous11/09/13
agree with waste of time
you started in the middle of the story wheres the background? wheres the character development? who are they what kind of relationship do they have before this and why should we care if they get together? why does she want to have sex with her brother and why isn't he freaked out by it? you have enough plot holes to sink a battleship time to delete and rewrite using a good editor and filling in the major plot holes.
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Anonymous11/10/13
Ignore the semi-literate trolls
All you trolls and dumbass halfwits, you didn't pay for this story, so you get what the author wanted to write, not what you wanted; if you don't like it, write one yourself, or fuck off and read something else, there's no legal compulsion for you to read through to the end then shit your pants at the author because it doesn't say exactly what your own nasty little kink demands; grow up or go away. I'm waiting for the story to finish before I start judging anything; maybe you should too. In the meantime, 5 stars.
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Anonymous01/14/14
More
I look forward to more. As for the negative comments, ignore and delete.
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Anonymous04/30/14
IF YOU ARE SMART ( and so far you have proved you aren't)
if you are smart you will ignore the underage fake raves and listen only to the complaints that is the ONLY way you will improve IF YOU WANT TO THAT IS.
as a series it sucks you have so many holes in the plot that it makes swiss cheese look solid. the best thing you can do is delete and rewrite using a good editor and use longer chapters. all three chapters should have been posted as one, and it should have been chapter two of three. go back to school and learn this time around then you might be an ok writer but not now.
English
Very good.
I'm enjoying this story & I can't wait to read more.
Thank you . . .
I only just found you, as it HAS been a year since your last offering. The story is, as said before, well written. As I am a sentimentalist, you have me enjoying your work. True love is propelling these two, as opposed to carnal or animalistic desire. There is still an innocence there, as well. Please keep up the good work. It is truly enjoyable. Also, I admire your open-mindedness with regard to some of the critiques.
good but
don't get lazy either finish it properly or delete the series never leave the readers hanging
Love it
Please write more it's a great story so far
Extra nice.
A lovely, gentle erotic encounter.
I am more than happy to ignore their relationship in the light of such love.
total waste of time and space
no background an unrealistic rush to sex and no end add up to a waste of time. either delete and rewrite this adding the background and end using a good editor or just delete it. as is the series sucks and not in a good way it would have ben better if you had never posted at all rather than post less than half a story.
you just have to hate these trolls...
hey, anonymous commtn, let me tell you that you succeded: I'm mad. Why write such nonsense instead of doing something better with your life, nobody forced you to read this story if you don't like it -.-
Try reading all three parts
dumbass.
agree with waste of time
you started in the middle of the story wheres the background? wheres the character development? who are they what kind of relationship do they have before this and why should we care if they get together? why does she want to have sex with her brother and why isn't he freaked out by it? you have enough plot holes to sink a battleship time to delete and rewrite using a good editor and filling in the major plot holes.
Ignore the semi-literate trolls
All you trolls and dumbass halfwits, you didn't pay for this story, so you get what the author wanted to write, not what you wanted; if you don't like it, write one yourself, or fuck off and read something else, there's no legal compulsion for you to read through to the end then shit your pants at the author because it doesn't say exactly what your own nasty little kink demands; grow up or go away. I'm waiting for the story to finish before I start judging anything; maybe you should too. In the meantime, 5 stars.
More
I look forward to more. As for the negative comments, ignore and delete.
IF YOU ARE SMART ( and so far you have proved you aren't)
if you are smart you will ignore the underage fake raves and listen only to the complaints that is the ONLY way you will improve IF YOU WANT TO THAT IS.
as a series it sucks you have so many holes in the plot that it makes swiss cheese look solid. the best thing you can do is delete and rewrite using a good editor and use longer chapters. all three chapters should have been posted as one, and it should have been chapter two of three. go back to school and learn this time around then you might be an ok writer but not now.
oh this is getting good
hope you are going to write some more please
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