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Background
This tale really seems to need further background; we're told they're on the run, but not why. Their families are mysteriously missing, they apparently have cause to worry that they'll be spotted and... reported? Hunted down? There are apparently faceless men roaming the streets looking for them, and possibly for others as well, but no hint of if they are soldiers or gangsters or anything of the sort. Then they find an abandoned and boarded up house that just happens to have all the ammenities they need plus some? I do not mean to discourage, and I can see this is not your first story by far, but the premise feels very shaky and really needs to be built upon to make this work.
Great Start
This is a great start to a series. I would love to see where this goes.
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wtf?
It sounds like
A story from the move a handmaids tale and needs more great work
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