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by Anonymous

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by wildsweetone04/20/11

standard imagery visualised

and written in a new way. i like it. :)

could 'who shares your bed' be simply, 'bedded'? would it make any difference to the poem?

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by twelveoone04/20/11

this

titters between poetry and "something you would send your girlfriend". Just reminding you there is a line where you lose half of the audience.
A5

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