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That was sweet
I loved the very end Jared has become quite kinky no? Lol
Loved it
I have nothing bad to say, LOL, sorry! The war story was a nice touch, I really liked that.
i too
cannot even rip a tiny bit off the corner its a wonderful story and i hope you keep it going for a long time yet.
LOVE, LOVE, LOVE THIS STORY
I am not sure where you can go in this story because the world can be an ugly place.., but can Jared & Darryl's time together always be good? PLEASE?
There is nothing to tear it just gets better and better
spelling
You use "strait" when you mean "straight". "Strait" means "narrow" or "confined", thus straitjacket, straitlaced, Straits of Gibraltar.
Shower scene seems odd in that the boy doesn't seem to notice the man's amputation. An amputated foot and the scarring from an exploding grenade isn't something that wouldn't be noticed - the boy would have a reaction.
I like the boy, but I'm a bit worried about the man just being a dirty old man, at this point.
Damn you Cruel, you put tears in my eyes, what a sweet ending! can't wait to read the rest,this story is getting better and better!
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