All Comments on 'A Girl and her Dog on Skunk Hollow Road'

not much fun, kind of reminds me of Bukowski taking lessons from Frost

Kind of makes me ask the question...

Whose tail will freeze again tonight?

OK, enuff of my nonsense.

Why "perhaps"?

Actually the element of uncertainty doesn't work for me, the distance is too great, "tosses her find", what find? oh that "something the little girl has found"

"like a green-sleeves whore Servicing state fair farm cocks quickly Behind a stained yellow tent in October." kind of stretches the simile for a trailer missing a skirt.

As a matter a fact, I'd swear you've been reading my stuff. Proximity patterning works best in short grammatical structures. Or you've been reading Shakespeare, who would have taken some of it out of the Anglo-Saxon.

Or I could be completely wrong. I gave you a 5, you got some nice stuff.

ROI

what is my return on investment?

I had to read this several times to decipher the ambiguous lines. It reads as if the little girl is left tied to the junks. The clue the dog is female is left behind in the first line. This is a cascade of stark images, but too much is left between the lines.

to pen up a feral spirit should be an omen, TK U MLJ LV NV