All Comments on 'My Sister'

such sisters exist only in the sick imagination of some frustrated guys

Then why did you read the story?

Terrible!!

going by the writing and the girls name it seems you are from a nonenglish country. if you are from a nonenglish country then you need to remove thiis story and do one of two things

1)rewrite this in your native language then post it in the forgien language area or

2) get a good editor and have them rewrite this so that it is readable

SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING AND ALWAYS WRITE IN YOUR NATIVE LANGUAGE AND PUT IT IN THE FORGIEN LANGUAGE AREA

Get the message!!!!!!! Before you embarrass another person look to your own problems and cure them first!!!!! DUMB ASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!

If you want to write erotica, keep writing , but you need a lot more practice,

this was shit

I only read a short part of the story and said to myself ~~ no more of this garbage.

You are on the list of my "no read stories" if you can call this a story.!!

The concept was nice but beyond that it was worthless. Especially once bragging about drinking ability and size came into it. For that reason, I would agree with several other responders and say leave the writing for others.

Blaaaaaaaaahahahaha, what a dumb fuckin name. This story blew, dude.

Yes, there were a lot of errors, and the help of a good Editor is sorely needed, but .....

Before you criticise another person for bad writing, check that your own doesn't also leave something to be desired.

For instance, check your grammar, your punctuation and the spelling of 'foreign'!

Where is the rest of this story? How did this get accepted with how short it is?

It's so funny to read these serious comments that analyze the story as if it were literature. Hey, just accept that it's simply the fantasy of someone who doesn't write very well--just like most of the stories on this site. If you are looking for well-written flash fiction, this ain't the place. I've been reading stories here for a year, and it's rare to find anything literary. Most don't hold my attention beyond the first paragraph, but I just accept that and move on to the next story.

Hey this sounds like it could be a true storie but ..who knows ... good for u if it is

I couldn't even masturbate to this shit. Hopefully you improve before you write again.

Simply basic. Probably would have been better if it took a little longer to develop. It's a written quickie. More power if it does the job.

It was simple, straight-forward, and very exciting. When Felix's sister finds out what he's got swinging between his legs, his big fat prick, she's got to have it, and Felix, like a good brother gives it to her, good and hard. He unloads his big brotherly balls up his sister's cute little cunt, for the first but not the last time.