by cavu182
leave more comments, less poetry, I don't have to express an opinion, I usually do, I usually vote a 5, your loss. I didn't vote.
that I think you could develop. The last part peters out, and the refs to the publications don't really tie into the rest. There are some good lines, nice sense of the futility of one-night stands. I would transpose hard and eager in L8, V2. It is worth you doing more with it.