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New Life Ch. 03

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by SouthernPassion5305/01/11

Excellent so far

This is an excellent story line and you definitely need to continue it. The sex not withstanding, it is a good plot and the flow woeks well.

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by Anonymous05/02/11

Not going where I thought it would..

From the first chapter I thought it would go in a different direction, then it seemed to again in this chapter but then you veered away again.. I get that's he's a nice guy and all.. but this is a sex story site and the theme is mind control.. And you're writing a story where he has it but feels bad using it and when he does abruptly stops.. Hardly satisfying.

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by wanusp05/03/11

I Like it

I am pleased so far. Resolving ethical dilemmas is rarely simple or clearcut. Write your story. Don't worry about categories.

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