This was really good. Not just the build-up and the sexiness of it, but the actual writing of the story. I loved all the small details and that you bothered to make the characters intelligent and likable. Great read.
Absolutely wonderfully written. You have a great sense for the feel of the language, the euphony of it. The dialogue comes natural and honest. The emotions are there, believable, and the action honest and sexual without being smutty...this is what a story should be.
A lot of incest stories written are trash. This, however, is a great example of how a story should be written. NOT the kind where a youngster is abused and used, but how adults can and do share in a loving sexual relationship. KUDOS....
I enjoy both the clarity of your writing style and your command of the language. I will look forward to the next chapter and hope you will be with us a long while.
The title is a bit weak, but that's all. This is a very well written, expertly crafted story. Characterisations and dialogue are spot on (something rare in incest fiction) A lot of care and attention has been given to the sex scenes. A real enjoy to read as other people have commented on.
It will be interesting to see how the story develops.
English
Wow
This was really good. Not just the build-up and the sexiness of it, but the actual writing of the story. I loved all the small details and that you bothered to make the characters intelligent and likable. Great read.
Lovely
Absolutely wonderfully written. You have a great sense for the feel of the language, the euphony of it. The dialogue comes natural and honest. The emotions are there, believable, and the action honest and sexual without being smutty...this is what a story should be.
BEAUTIFUL
It has what a lot of incest stories lack; inner conflict, build up, realism, and realistic dialgoue.
And speaking of that dialogue- it was fantastic...smartly written with charm and erotic tension to it.
While reading it, I could actually visual it happening, that's how smooth and realistic the whole thing flowed.
I really look forward to more stories from you. And hopefully there is some mother/son material in your horizon- I'd love to read your take on that.
WOW FUCK...
where is little brother and little cousin...very best incest fuck!!!
Love at it's simplest level
A lot of incest stories written are trash. This, however, is a great example of how a story should be written. NOT the kind where a youngster is abused and used, but how adults can and do share in a loving sexual relationship. KUDOS....
What a delicate and lovely tale.
Superb writing. Thank you.
I thought it was extraordinarily well written.
I enjoy both the clarity of your writing style and your command of the language. I will look forward to the next chapter and hope you will be with us a long while.
Good job, Man!
I liked it very much! More, please!
A ~~ "5" ......
A ~~ "5" for sure and can't wait for part 2 - 3 - ect.! One of the best stories that I have read in awhile. Keep it up.* Thanks. JAG
mmmmmmmmmm!
Love, love, love a big old daddy losing control, grabbin' up and plowing into his baby girl! Soo hot!
Very hot!!! Please continue.
One of the Best
Great story and writing, not the same ole same ole. Really enjoyed it and hope you continue with the story and more.
Gotta have more!
A hot, lovable daddy who can't deny his baby girl, nice!
Cream of the incest crop
The title is a bit weak, but that's all. This is a very well written, expertly crafted story. Characterisations and dialogue are spot on (something rare in incest fiction) A lot of care and attention has been given to the sex scenes. A real enjoy to read as other people have commented on.
It will be interesting to see how the story develops.
Well done.
Good story and action.
Hi, haven't seen you in 3 years
let me see if I can seduce you,
dad
Nice!
I can't wait for more.
MORE¡¡¡
That was sweet, sexy, hot, perfect
I need Ch 07¡¡¡
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