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by twelveoone04/28/11

4th down

(death card) just means it gets special attention. First two stanzas read like good prose. Third get's stretched and wretched, overwrought, 4th line the worst. End line makes no sense to me. After that it seems you are throwing "jarring" images, But they jar in the wrong way. Cliched. The last stanza, is the best both as prose and poetry. In need of weeding. The propose of:
The vegetation in dregs.
Spawning restraint's blight.
etc.?
I did not vote.

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