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Why
do I get the feeling I'm reading Desmond Morris? It reads halfway between prose and poetry, as if you weren't sure what direction to go in. As a read, it has some very good stuff, you always do, this one bears some rethinking. A5
5
I like the build up of emotion and how it tapers off.... and the comparison between the narrator and the flint chipping cousin was great!
*****
Five.
It's a wonderful montage
of ancient and modern, slipping in and out of time. I felt there were a couple of places where you could still polish to the burnish your name deserves. A lovely, though-provoking piece.
Well now...
I love this one. Understated but powerful in its contrasting of past and present - less contrast and much more putting forth parallels - thoughtfully (weapons/cellphone & wallet). I don't mind the interweaving of poetry and prose, unlike 12 mentioned. It reads like poetry to me, and I can see myself in the position of both hunter and hunted.
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