by rufriter
I liked the story. I just wonder if anyone will get pregnant down the line.
way to dumb you are adding way too many people to the incest. when it comes to incest it HAS to be the fewer the better. it would have been better if it was just the twins or the twins and mom. but to have both mom and sis fucking gramps ruined the story. remember "KISS-KEEP IT SIMPLE STUPID" this was way to complicated.
DBRS
This is well written and exhibits the perfect mix of characters and relationships. I mean that I really liked it! There is plenty of space for more plot development and I hope to see Chapter Two soon. Forget about the commentary stating that there were too many people, etc. One look at that commentator's grammar should immediately tell you that you should ignore him. Now get busy on Chapter Two. An Hoa Rifleman
You need to write about what happens when Gramps goes home and he is left to take care of both his mother and sister. That would be a very interesting storyline.
Having both mother and sister as willing sex partners, his life is going to be filled with pleasure.
A great fantasy and a great read.
Thanks for the good story.
First of all, a great title. Literotica has an abundance of stories to choose from so having a title to hook the reader is essential. This title caught my eye. The mood of the story was fine and I actually liked that incest grew to include all the family members. It is good to take things to the extreme - then take them further. Some of the dialogue was quite poor, I couldn't belief characters talking like that, regardless of the taboos they are breaking.Didn't like the narrator's terms such as 'fuck-pole'. He comes across as a fairly naive 17 year old, which works well for the story, but when he uses terms as fuck-pole it suggests he is sexually quite active and experienced which detracts from his character. Still, a good, enjoyable read.
Firstly, thank you to all who took the time to comment, either positively or negatively. A writer cannot develop unless he takes on board all criticism.
To Corpse_Rider, with regard to the central character seeming to be experienced, perhaps you missed the reference to him having spent two years gaining plenty of experience with village girls in Cambodia. Your other points are well taken and appreciated though.
To the negative comments, I can only say that it is impossible to please everyone, so the only thing to do is try to please most.
Thank you all again.
Mom and Danni have been fucking Gramps for a while so they must be on the pill since neither is pregnant. As a welcome home present each could offer Daniel to let him impregnate her, thereby continuing the family tradition of the females giving birth to incestuous bastards.
Hope there will be more chapters.
Hello Rufriter,
Damn good story with some real
graphic sex, I will check out your
other stories after the holiday, hope
yours is a wonderfull day with family
and friends.
You sort of take a moment to establish the main son character and that he cares about his twin and his mother. Then, as he is supposedly making love to her, he starts speaking to her like she's the cheapest town whore. Later, it's back to heartfelt lovemaking even as it spreads to include the twin sister and grandpa who is also (no surprise) the twins' father. The out of character whore/slut banter ruined the allegedly loving sex scenes anyway.
I'm not sure how you got it past the editors about the mom's age when gramps took her cherry but maybe I misread that detail. The standard eighteen would have been just fine. Overall, way too rushed and totally unbelievable in execution. A nice story idea though.
I somehow feel like the boy is getting screwed in more than one way.Guess gramps will nock up the sister then bugger the boy.
with the writers of so many of these stories necessitating that all males wear shorts? In the days when I was growing up, boys looked forward to the day they were not forced by their mother to wear shorts. It was a sign they were becoming a young man. From that day forward they worse shorts only at home, except swimming trunks. Be a man and wear slacks or remain a boy and wear shots.
Really 'you filthy whore'?
It started so good, and then you start to put that in the mouth of 17th year old...
Just plain stupid, 1 star, and I stopped reading
To Anonymous who commented 5 days ago :-
You got the age wrong, but other than that I agree entirely.
This was one of my earliest submissions, written ten years ago when I made the mistake of writing what I thought others would want to read, rather than how I felt.
Any interaction between mother and son, father and daughter, brother and sister etc. regardless of the nature, MUST be based on the deepest mutual love and respect.
I would cut my own throat before I would call my mother, daughter or sister a whore, whether I was fucking her or not.
Liked the story but it would have been better if you had more info on the grandfather, daughter and grandaughter relationship 4 stars!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!