After Barbara recovered, her mouth descended on Bill's cock. As she gave him pleasure she whispered, "I never would have thought I'd let you rim me but it was it was great." >Tom< was surprised that she knew the term "rim" but decided it had just become a recurring part of their sex life. Barbara slowly and lovingly brought Bill to a huge cum.
My training starts in two days! I can't wait and Thank you for giving my Master the idea!
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Anonymous10/07/11
Just awful
This was not hot nor well written. Tone was bad, scenes left much to be desired, and there was no consistency in the time line. I know it's supposed to be a dirty story but the thing about erotica is that it is still the written word. This was crap.
This was pretty good. I liked it well enough to wonder if you couldn't add another chapter to it, maybe a 3 page chapter and with her like letting some one else use her pussy and ban her husband from being able to screw her pussy something like thst maybe. But for4 me this was a pretty good story good job.
English
Good job
Does Barbara have a sister?
Slight criticism...
After Barbara recovered, her mouth descended on Bill's cock. As she gave him pleasure she whispered, "I never would have thought I'd let you rim me but it was it was great." >Tom< was surprised that she knew the term "rim" but decided it had just become a recurring part of their sex life. Barbara slowly and lovingly brought Bill to a huge cum.
WHO IS TOM?
bill? tom? multiple personalities?
WTF
Good story
Like was said, maybe barb has a sister?
mmmm
My training starts in two days! I can't wait and Thank you for giving my Master the idea!
Just awful
This was not hot nor well written. Tone was bad, scenes left much to be desired, and there was no consistency in the time line. I know it's supposed to be a dirty story but the thing about erotica is that it is still the written word. This was crap.
Damn
Wish my wife would agree to anal
not bad not too bad at all
This was pretty good. I liked it well enough to wonder if you couldn't add another chapter to it, maybe a 3 page chapter and with her like letting some one else use her pussy and ban her husband from being able to screw her pussy something like thst maybe. But for4 me this was a pretty good story good job.
Who
is Tom?????
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