The Prodigal Slut

Actually, there is one thing worse

Lecturing other people about their fantasies and turn-ons, while offering none of your own, and risking nothing. And reading stories in the Loving Wives category, and then pretending to be shocked and disappointed when they actually ARE Loving Wives in the STORY.

Great Start

I hope you give her account of the night and not just him getting his sloppy seconds... fourths!

A "loving wife"?

Where?

Short, hot and well written.

Hello Anonymous0? This is an erotic website? You should be old enough now to understand that. You realise you have to be eighteen to access?

Hot stuff.

Good story.
Of course, there's no such thing as a perfect story. This one could have been improved in a few ways.
It would have been nice to hear Halie's entire confession, blurted out between her shrieks and grunts, rather than just an expository summary. As well, the final paragraph contained further unnecessary exposition that could have been delivered more subtly as dialogue between Halie and her husband. Finally, the more you tell us about what Halie and her husband are feeling - their feelings about this situation have to be conflicted and interesting - the better.
Oh, and it was unfortunate that your one-line blurb gave away the big surprise that Halie was a willing wife, not a victim of stranger rape before I even started reading the story.
Nevertheless, I found this story well worth reading. Thanks.

Good story

Nice story from the wifes perspective.

Thanks!

Thank you, LeeScarlet. I appreciate the constructive criticism. This piece was written a couple of years ago for an erotic writing competition so I had to take a large pair of scissors to it for the sake of brevity.

But you are correct, I could have given more details about that night's activities. I will try to do that next time. In this case, they were secondary to my husband's desire to see just how far I would go.

As for the trolls, they're unnecessary and annoying. I don't mind removing insulting comments.

Interesting story

I think that the author could have created some tension (and a bit of realism, which adds erotic appeal for me) had the protagonist required her partner(s) to use condoms - so other than a well used pussy there wouldn't have been the evidence - so she would have had to explain in detail what she'd done


Good story idea -

Point taken, Morant - this was my dramatization of a real experience (sorry for not making that clear) in which the other men did in fact use condoms. But being a fan of cum play, I didn't think that detail added much to the fantasy.

I have other stories on my blog (linked on my profile, which I filled out this morning) and some feature condoms, some don't. I guess it depends on where my mood is at the moment.

Good story, more content though

It would have been nice to hear about her escapades with the three guys. Let's see what else you can come up with her to do and more descriptive scenes.
All and all a good story.

The lady is a slut

A good solid story. Great title and the last line is also very good. I agree with some others who have left comments. Having her reveal her escapades while being sexually interogated would have added to the piece.

love the thing that you left out giving the imagenation a chance

great story the writing we awesome. reading this has and added, part to the story could have been longer as i was just getting into it, but hey im sure this is only the start of something good. so more please more.

You Done Good Guy

Any first time writer who elicits 10 comments with his first story has done very well.

I agree it could have longer. Still it got several readers attention and that is an authors job.

Keep up the good work.

Mike

THE GAMES THEY PLAYED

could cause mayhem. TK U MLJ LV NV

Keep at it!

Right now, your advanced degree is a little more apparent than it needs to be. You have a dirty mind and a way with words; relax and just let the story come to you.

We enjoyed this and hope to see more.