All Comments on 'Dominance Reversal'

Really good story, I liked it a lot. It is nice for a cheat to get their rewards. Do you intend her to feminise him, to stop him going out the house?

Great story! I hope you keep this going!

A great, 5 * story - it is always so sweet to see the biter bitten!

More please, and don't make us wait too long to find out what happens next.

Thank you.

I Loved this first [I HOPE] part and can't wait to see what is next for Jake, starting with his new feminine name which could be a sissy name or a humiliating name or my Favorite a name fitting the big boobed, high heel, mini skirt, slutty make-up wearing, cock craving whore he is about to become since the only way he -she will be able to cum is by getting a big cock to slide against and pound into her newfound G-spot, yes the right names means a lot to a new gurl. I got mine from my mom when she caught me in her bra,panties,garterbelt, hose and heels with my legs over my head giving myself a huge open mouth facial. She said Sally was an old friend of hers from high school that liked for guy's to cum on her face too. With Cindy being so rich the possibilities are endless like buying her new slut heels with 3,4,5,and then the sluttiest 6 inch heels with locking ankle straps so she can not only learn the art of walking in heels but wearing them 24/7 will soon give her calves and legs the feminine look a good cock hungry whore needs. Nothing can beat a tight corset or waist cincher and 6 inch heels with a plug or dildo up your pussy to teach a slut the proper strut a good cum loving, can't wait to get fucked slut needs to have. How big will her boobs be and how many ear piercings . WOW Will she pump her new slut full of hormones to render her clit useless except for peeing and maybe have a doctor sew her once hanging balls up in their sockets the use the loose sac to form her some pussy lips with her clit hidden inside ....CUM on Baby HURRY with the next part....KISS KISS..Sally

interesting tale, no typos,easy reading. shows great potential for many future chapters! WELL DONE!

Its a great beginning , love the premise , try for the more natural speech K , how folks will speak and think when writing their thoughts and statements should have a natural feel to it. I don;t know how far your going to go but go for descriptive with the emotions and sensations , bring the readers IN, make them feel like its them and how it would feel if it was =)

He needs some 5" black patent leather opera pumps with a sharp pointed toe and dagger like heels!

Can't wait to see where this goes. I was femmed 16 years ago and fought it for a short while, but when I gave in it was like a new wonderful world opened up for me.

Be home in thirty minutes huh?

Humm, so many possibilities. I'm looking forward to part 2.

Thanks

Love to see Cindy:

1. Bring Sarah home to see 'Jacqueline' in his new role.

2. Sarah being more amused and pleased than shocked.

3. Both Women taunting and ridiculing him and all males in general.

3. Cindy and Sarah finding each other far more interesting and exciting than 'that ludicrous male'.

4. "Jacqui" becoming merely maidservant to Cindy's and Sara's Sapphic union.

5. The two Women joining or starting a Female Supremacist group with the goal of reversing roles of all Females and males

6. Story ending with "Jacqueline" tearfully serving at the group's meeting, HIS brand pretty pert new C-cup breast implants being ELABORATELY made fun of by all Females attending.

great story!!!

not nearly enough content...as well as nothing erotic happend in the short story.. A man cheats and finds a maids outfit... not that good to end on

Go into the garage and cut the cage off. Call a friend to bring you some clothes or search the house for your clothes. The chances are that they are there somewhere. Pack your wifes clothes in plastic garbage bags. Place them on the front door. Get on the computer, close the bank accounts, cancel the credit cards. When she gets home, take her house key, the garage door opener, pack her things in her car and throw her out. What's she going to do? Beat you up?

It's OK attempt for first try, but you are really too quick in the story, it needs more details and tension. Build your story up, let the reader enjoy interesting or tense moments longer, I think is good to avoid having very small sentences too close to each other, because you trying to make erotic material here, not to tell a joke anekdote, you know what I mean ?:)

What's she going to do? Beat you up? The cage is easily removed with a tool that's found in everyones garage. Don't write about stuff you don't understand. The rest is simply silly. Badly conceived. Poorly written. Not a single clever thing about it. A complete waste of time to read.

Please continue , love it

Michelle

I SURE THAT'S NOT YHE END, I WOU?D LIKE TO THINK THE BEST IS YET TO COME!

He went into the garbage, grabbed a pair of pliers and removed the cage. It's a toy. Better yet, he went down to the Police, suffered some embarrassement and had a locksmith remove it. His wife went to jail as it is illegal to lock a cage on someone. He divorced her and kept all the assets in the divorce while she was in jail. The end.

A little short but well put together. I look forward to more stories.

He laughed in her face and filed for a divorce. Quit his job? She makes enough to support them both? I don't think so. He quits and they lose everything inside 6 months. So that was just stupid. The cage? Don't make me laugh. It's a toy. He can remove it any time he wants without a key. Better yet, she leaves, he goes down to a locksmiths and has 20 keys made and hides them all around the house and in his car so he can take it off any time he wants. A cock cage? Please. Don't make me laugh. His clothes? She's gone first call he makes is to his girlfriend to warn her and gets her to bring him some clothes. So that idea was just stupid too. I can't wait until she wants him to wash her clothes and he throws ALL her clothes, bra, underwear, blouses, etc. into one load with her colored things. Everything comes out pink and shrunk. Too bad. So sad.

Good beginning but really short. I am curious to see how Cindy will punish him. I hope she punishes Sarah as well.

I think it is well-written and quite erotic.

Number one I think he would have left her. When she leaves the bag at the end, he would have thrown her out. Number two, the cage is a toy that can be removed without the key. And number three, by putting him in the cage she commits several crimes for which he can send her to jail. No real bright.