Not What It Seems Ch. 06

NO T.T woman dont do this to me! keep writting -_- T.T

Definitely 5 points & glad u continue it...

keep writing!!!

this is so good. i hope the conspiracy and the truth will soon come out. i do not want to see people as pawn by others. there is justice!! hahahaha.

keep writing and do it fast pleaseeeee.....

Keep it up...with suggestions

The story is intriguing and sexy at times, but it's starting to bother me that poor Alin has two seemingly oblivious friends (Hallie and Ryan), a jackass dad, and two conniving, manipulative, mean-spirited men (Jared and John) in her life. Poor girl can't catch a break! Jared comes off, to me at least, as more emotionally abusive (possessive and belittling, not to mention the sexual extortion he's forcing Alin into) than anything else, and Alin really deserves better. I hope that Jared starts to be more loving and less possessive and mean in the next chapter, or else he won't make a very good romantic hero, right? If he keeps behaving as he has, Alin's caving to her sexual desires when she's with him will stop being believable. (Mind you, this is all just conjecture/opinion!)

No matter where you decide to take your story, I can't wait for the next chapter! Good luck with real life commitments--we hope to see you back here soon!

an idiot

he's a dick and she's a naive idiot. this story us good but i hate how she easily falls for anything given to her, yet she is suppose to be smart?

I NEED THIS TO WORK OUT!!!

I've always hated the stories where a character (usually the woman) gets wronged and then BLINDLY falls for the guy who wronged her.
THIS IS ONE OF THOSE STORIES!!!
I've been BATTLING with myself to stop reading this story, but I want it to turn out right!
Women don't just forgive men that cheat on them!
It's STUPID!!!
Make this a GOOD story, or so help me I'm going to SMASH my DAMN computer.
AND THEN MAKE YOU PAY FOR IT!!!
You Have Been Warned.

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