a teaser..my gawd i couldnt wait to hear what happened...i hope yer workin on the last...as i had to go to the next story to finish my self off...hehhe i let my fingers do the walking thinkin of naughty brotherly touches...
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Anonymous05/13/11
High school, again?
Good story....but did hee make it? More, I hope.11ce
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Anonymous05/13/11
More please
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Anonymous05/13/11
Write it or...
Dont write it. Dont play games.
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Anonymous05/13/11
More more more
please add part 2 asap! great so far
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Anonymous05/13/11
mmmmmm-definitely more
This is so hot. I can just see myself as your sister-oh god yes. Don't stop now big brother.
Trying to write a 'cliffhanger' ending doesn't work here. It tends to piss people off.
As for the story, it's kind of contrived, but that is true of a lot of stories here. These two have known each other for eighteen years, at least. The sister would surely have had more to say under the circumstances.
Disappointed in Disappointed. Well woopdeedoo. You want someone to pat you on the back? Beg you maybee? Please, please, please? Get a life. It wasnt a bad start but thats it. To short and then the Should I continue routine. If youve got to ask then dont. You dont want to write you want to get stroked. Mike in Missouri.
This was a really good start, hope you continue. The guy thinks in his head a little too much, kind of turns off the mood. Other than that I thought it was good.
THIS HEAR COMMENT IS FOUR THE DIPSTICK, THAT SAID IT WAS "HORRIBLE & FUCKING STUPID" DEW EWE NO THAT EWE WERE KNOT FORCED TOO READ HIS STORY, NOR DID EWE HAVE TWO READ IT INN ITS ENTIRETY..EWE DID IT THROUGH YOUR OWN CHOICES...BTW ITS MY OPINION THAT SHOULD ONE KEEP READING SOMETHING THAT THEY FIND BORING OR TRULY LOATH,CAN KNOT BEE PLAYING WITH A FULL DECK.. THERE FORE EYE WOOD KNOT PLACE TWO MUCH FAITH IN THERE OPINION..WHILE EWE MAY CRITICIZE MY I,Q, I AM SMART ENOUGH TOO STOP READING THINGS EYE FIND BORING ORE THAT EYE DEW KNOT LIKE.. ( NOTE TO THE AUTHOR); I FOUND YOUR STORY ENTERTAINING, AND LIKE MOST OTHERS I FELT IT TO BE TO SHORT.SEW PLEASE FINISH IT....
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Anonymous05/14/11
Is that the same 'oldwayne' that's always on the loving wives thread spouting his morality about sluts and their hubbies?
fucking dirty cunting hypocrite...
P.S a five star to you author(for leaving this up)
This is the kind of story I would really like IF I liked looking at a chocolate cake but never getting to taste it, Seeing a pitcher of iced tea on a hot summer's day and knowing it wasn't for me, smelling the cookies coming out of the oven knowing they were for a neighbors party, not for me.
However, I'm not that kind of guy. I'd like to start reading a story knowing it had an ending. For me, it would be a service if you prefaced your submission with a few words telling us you didn't bother to finish it.
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Anonymous03/11/12
nice
Yes please continue. I like the turmoil and questions in his head. Thanks Len
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Anonymous08/26/12
THIS SUCKS
Y SO SHORT? NO ATTENTION SPAN?
1 STAR!
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Anonymous01/09/13
scrubs
So this is what it would sound like if Dr J.D was feeling up his sister lol (if he had one)
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Anonymous01/15/13
Why so short
I was just getting into it and then it stops? Wth? Write more good job
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Anonymous07/30/13
What?
just gettin' interesting. Got
anymore imagination there ?
English
continue
Disappointed
Why would you stoop so low as to write a teaser? Don't you have enough self worth to complete what you wrote?
MORE!
Don't stop now.....Big Brother is on a roll....
more please
titfuck please!
Titfuck her please
Dear Disappointed
You sure know how to encourage a guy.
jackass!
a teaser..my gawd i couldnt wait to hear what happened...i hope yer workin on the last...as i had to go to the next story to finish my self off...hehhe i let my fingers do the walking thinkin of naughty brotherly touches...
High school, again?
Good story....but did hee make it? More, I hope.11ce
More please
Write it or...
Dont write it. Dont play games.
More more more
please add part 2 asap! great so far
mmmmmm-definitely more
This is so hot. I can just see myself as your sister-oh god yes. Don't stop now big brother.
Heather
HELL YES...CONTINUE
I am hard and no where to go. I am stroking my cock and you left me hanging.
Cheap Shot
Trying to write a 'cliffhanger' ending doesn't work here. It tends to piss people off.
As for the story, it's kind of contrived, but that is true of a lot of stories here. These two have known each other for eighteen years, at least. The sister would surely have had more to say under the circumstances.
More
Yes go on.SOON
Gees Petskunk...
Disappointed in Disappointed. Well woopdeedoo. You want someone to pat you on the back? Beg you maybee? Please, please, please? Get a life. It wasnt a bad start but thats it. To short and then the Should I continue routine. If youve got to ask then dont. You dont want to write you want to get stroked. Mike in Missouri.
Bring it on!
Five Stars for what you've done so far.
Huh ?
What ? You wanna serialise it ?
Don't boher dude. It's too tame and way too much hard work to read.
Horrible and fucking stupid!
This story was just horrible and fucking stupid. Thanks for wasting my time.
Great start
Keep it coming
Hell yeah continue...
This is a great start.
This was a really good start, hope you continue. The guy thinks in his head a little too much, kind of turns off the mood. Other than that I thought it was good.
Grrr
Come on i wanna read more!!!
UNFINISHED BUT ENJOYABLE
THIS HEAR COMMENT IS FOUR THE DIPSTICK, THAT SAID IT WAS "HORRIBLE & FUCKING STUPID" DEW EWE NO THAT EWE WERE KNOT FORCED TOO READ HIS STORY, NOR DID EWE HAVE TWO READ IT INN ITS ENTIRETY..EWE DID IT THROUGH YOUR OWN CHOICES...BTW ITS MY OPINION THAT SHOULD ONE KEEP READING SOMETHING THAT THEY FIND BORING OR TRULY LOATH,CAN KNOT BEE PLAYING WITH A FULL DECK.. THERE FORE EYE WOOD KNOT PLACE TWO MUCH FAITH IN THERE OPINION..WHILE EWE MAY CRITICIZE MY I,Q, I AM SMART ENOUGH TOO STOP READING THINGS EYE FIND BORING ORE THAT EYE DEW KNOT LIKE.. ( NOTE TO THE AUTHOR); I FOUND YOUR STORY ENTERTAINING, AND LIKE MOST OTHERS I FELT IT TO BE TO SHORT.SEW PLEASE FINISH IT....
Is that the same 'oldwayne' that's always on the loving wives thread spouting his morality about sluts and their hubbies?
fucking dirty cunting hypocrite...
P.S a five star to you author(for leaving this up)
It's funny that when an author writes a "loving wife" story, the AUTHOR receives "threats" him/herself, but a husband is "allowed" to cheat?
keep
keep goin it was gettin good
Keep it coming
Very nice. Please do continue.
Yes
Yes keep it going.
YES YES
plz continue... he should fuck her perfect tits :)
GREAT STORY
Its a good one. Keep writing.
Tease!
This is the kind of story I would really like IF I liked looking at a chocolate cake but never getting to taste it, Seeing a pitcher of iced tea on a hot summer's day and knowing it wasn't for me, smelling the cookies coming out of the oven knowing they were for a neighbors party, not for me.
However, I'm not that kind of guy. I'd like to start reading a story knowing it had an ending. For me, it would be a service if you prefaced your submission with a few words telling us you didn't bother to finish it.
nice
Yes please continue. I like the turmoil and questions in his head. Thanks Len
THIS SUCKS
Y SO SHORT? NO ATTENTION SPAN?
1 STAR!
scrubs
So this is what it would sound like if Dr J.D was feeling up his sister lol (if he had one)
Why so short
I was just getting into it and then it stops? Wth? Write more good job
What?
just gettin' interesting. Got
anymore imagination there ?
Good
Please finish!
I like it
Definitely finish
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