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Hawthorne's Alphabet

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by Anonymous

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by live4passion05/10/11

and B..

for brutal. i love your title.

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by greenmountaineer05/10/11

Nicely done. Makes me want to go back and read The Scarlet Letter. I like the way you combined that with the 7 Deadly Sins. I'm assuming the bird represents the human frailty of projecting our inadequacies onto to something besides ourselves to despise. That tied the poem together for me.

The enjambment in L3 of the last stanza felt a little off. I might have replaced ungrateful with thankless.

I wish I could steal L1 of S3. Powerful.

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by Anonymous05/13/11

u could add

egocentric to ur list gurlie. its the one constant in all ur poetry

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by twelveoone05/15/11

Well

SR, I left a 5 and my suggestion is next time pin these things on a jackass, that way it won't seem so egocentric, but the jackass didn't leave a name. Let's give it one! Mannish gurl. Gurly unman, nah too gender nonspecific, and not grandiose enough. The Great Useless Moron, or GUM for short.

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