Chapter 2, great begining you should write more of this story.
great story; had me hot, too. Excellent story for a newer contributor and I hope you keep writing and giving us all such pleasure.
Although there is some nice descriptive writing here, the story suffers from poor and unrealistic dialogue: "It's ok. We're in this together sis. I've always loved you more than any boyfriend I've had....I just didn't think it'd be like this." This needs more work.
you need an editor...nice stoty though -A.
fix it up and get more creative and its be better trust me
I never read a virgin incest srory before... I like it. This is a very hot, detailed story 5/5
Amazing 10/10
10 outta 10 loved it
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Wonderful.
Chapter 2, great begining you should write more of this story.
Great loving
great story; had me hot, too. Excellent story for a newer contributor and I hope you keep writing and giving us all such pleasure.
A flower that needs arranging
Although there is some nice descriptive writing here, the story suffers from poor and unrealistic dialogue:
"It's ok. We're in this together sis. I've always loved you more than any boyfriend I've had....I just didn't think it'd be like this."
This needs more work.
need editor
you need an editor...nice stoty though
-A.
its ok
fix it up and get more creative and its be better trust me
New for me
I never read a virgin incest srory before... I like it. This is a very hot, detailed story 5/5
Amazing 10/10
Loved it
10 outta 10 loved it
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