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wow
If you hadn't said anything i would not have guessed that English is not your native tongue.
A beautiful, well written, tender story that I simply loved. Hope there is more of this to come.
A WOW READ
Well written. Be careful with that guy--HE IS CONTROLLING
First rate
A very good piece of erotica. Well written. Recommended.
Exquisite!
Such a lovely, lovely piece of erotica. to the other poster's comments about the guy being controlling -- in this context, I think that is exactly the point. To surrender to the moment, to one you trust implicitly...I found it gorgeously hot. Keep writing!!!
That was really beautiful
If there is agreement between the couple, I don't think it's controlling. More an understanding of each other's needs. And he didn't stop her from moving when she was coming apart. His initial command was all about getting her there for her benefit.
And such lovely intimate writing. They obviously care very much about each other. I'm not normally so into stories that have no obvious plot, but I really love this one, your writing drew me in.
Thank you
mmmm
i loved it and the new second chapter also, there is control and a small amount if dominance in every relationship, i think you balanced them well and you style of writing is intriguing reading
Very nice
Very nice, indeed. Looking forward to the next chapter.
being taken to yet another orgasm
so very hot and horny, the story was like watching it happen right in front of my eyes . seeing you start t have one cumming followed by yet another. the writing was brilliant love it so much. cant wait to read part two.
Thank you!
For the kind and thoughtful reviews. I really appreciate it and am glad that you like it! This really encourages me to keep writing because there are people who appreciate the erotic and sensuous part of it.
Well Done!
i can honestly say i'm deeply impressed..such detail..such raw emotion & connection between them both..i thoroughly enjoyed every word of it..it has inspired me on some Ideas..Very well done
Wow
Nicely written, and details.. wow. O.O My heart was pounding the whole time XD Awesome job :P
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