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Indian Summer

byDesejo©
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by Anonymous

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by live4passion05/16/11

beyond the limits...

made my skin tingle, beautiful
...of tolerance

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by lorencino06/01/11

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The weaving imagery is quite thrilling. There is also a satisfying sense of worldliness melded with compassion. I like.

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by Corpse_rider06/30/11

Moving . . .

An evocative and lyrical poem, that nets the reader and pulls them into the dream like imagery that permeates each stanza.

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by PandoraGlitters10/11/12

Great images

I enjoyed these fine images though, were I you, I would consider changing some of your verbals to verbs. Also, I'd stick with open punctuation throughout and not muddy this poem with any punctuation at all. Or punctuate throughout.

Well done.

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by Tsotha04/28/14

The last stanza made me think of vengeance. As in, burning things down. And being given ice cream doesn't sound so bad.

... ok, pretend I didn't say the above. I like how you set up the scene, it all seems merry until the sixth stanza. Great inversion there, it goes for the jugular. And the next line, "A brilliant Indian summer", it's impossible not to feel the hurt in it. I think you've conveyed both feelings well, successfully creating a contrast.

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