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by Anonymous05/18/11

The lack of punctuation, constant changing of POV and constant changing of language styles really ruined it for me, sorry. But I think if you work on your style you could be good.

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by Anonymous05/19/11

I liked the energy and passion in this story,I see the changing wrighting styles as the girl writing and then the guy wrighting .The constant changing of language styles i would say is due to the guy writes one way the girl another. All and all well done enjoyed it.

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