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by WillowedCabin05/18/11

Muse does erotica?

But seriously, this sounds like lyrics to a Muse song. I think the ideas here are cliche and if nothing else, the repetition makes me tune out about two lines in. I don't know if the repetition even serves a purpose in this. It seems neat and kitschy, which is at odds with the fervent (albeit, hackneyed) themes of this poem. A good risk, but feels like you got in the way of yourself.

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by UnderYourSpell05/20/11

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One I would suffice putting it on practically every line spoils completely what could have been a much better poem

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