great story. Really liked the turn that it took and it got me incredibly horny.
I really enjoyed this tale, the sex and descripton were both red hot and had me hard very quickly
why would Anon give a 1 after just the warning? This is a well written example of the genre. Why why why penalize the writer for writing something not Anon's kink?
Jen you capture the zest of LW perfectly in a few lines:
""I think you enjoy finding my panties wet."
"I wasn't jealous at all. In fact I was even more aroused knowing exactly what he was feeling. Sure, I wanted to be making love to my wife but this was something very new and very kinky. Most importantly, I was enjoying myself as I knew my wife was also."
I wished that you had not jumped so abruptly from having wine to nude in the bedroom - how and when did the clothes come off? The story was a tad short for me and adding more foreplay there would have been perfect.
Loving Wives is probably not the best section for this kind of story. There seems to be a vocal minority who enjoy this kind of story, but I think that for most readers of literotica this just ends up being considered spam.
Loads of guys have hang ups about cuck / bi scenarios which is why they complain like little whiny bitches on these stories. But if they didn't like it - they wouldn't be here reading it in the first place !! Just relax dudes - it's only a wank. Get over yourselves !
this is about a couple's journey. The wife knowing that her husband would enjoy the company of Mike and things heat up. Why is this the wrong category?
Since you asked the story was fine from a technical standpoint. The sex involving a beautiful wife without husband was erotic. For me the husband sucking cock detracted from the eroticism but others enjoyed it (favorite fantasy of my girlfriend) so congratulations on a successful story. If your goal is better ratings and more fans do consider heterosexual activity only. If not, more power to you and happy writing. I'll still be reading you and editing as I do. Thanks.
Good story, just a little short but well written.......a bit more detail, but all and all............
if this type of story isn't your thing, why do you read it? please, grow up and stop trying to punish others for your sorry state of mind. My Dr. Phil take on Anonymous is that you read the story, get exited, have a happy ending, then the guilt rocks your world so you lash out and try to pushing the author. what, are you 3? upset cuz your skirt is too tight? and for the fool that said "I read the warning then gave you a score of 1" why even bother? what's the point? are you that immature and mentally challenged?
I think you should have pointed out up front that the story involved MM action, as I normally avoid those stories. Well written otherwise.
I enjoyed the part about the self confidence of the lover. Several of my wifes lovers have given me the sneer when I met them and I loved the humiliation.
Apart from the issues of suspension of disbelief - the guy had never watched his wife screw another many and had never himself sucked cock - I wish you had taken the story to its (IMHO) logical conclusion and had the narrator role Mike over and fucked him anally - that would have made it a trifecta of new experiences
It also would have outrages the "Loving Wife" habitues who need to complain about something in just about every story
Liked it. Keep going.
Loved your story! You would be surprised how many women fantasize about this. Loved it. Is it hot in here?
My wife and I are liberated in our sexual behavior but today she'll only swing with another man and then only a couple times a year. Previously we were with other couples although not 'all the way'. This means both girls and guys for her. I'm straight but she became bi after we married. Something quite similar happened to me in a threesome. We have enjoyed FMF threesomes but in a MMF threesome, with my wife's help and encouragement (she held the guy's raging hard-on in her hands and told me, to "Suck him"), I ended up sucking the guy's dick to orgasm while she jacked him off. She found that very stimulating and later I realized I got off on it, too.
I have, I think, a contribution to the "help with grammar"...Several times you refer to "ridged" members: e.g. "With his ridged cock in my mouth...".
Unless you're referring to a cock shaped in ridges, I suspect you actually mean "rigid", as in stiff.
I really enjoyed your scenario of the wife riding her new lover in reverse cowboy position while hubby eats her, and to his surprise, her lover's cock. Been there, done that, love to read about it.
Oddly enough, this story kindled some interesting thoughts and reactions.
...is worth everything you pay for it. The writing was pretty good, but the plot was probably not my cup of tea. That's OK, I'm not foolish enough to want every story to be the same. The main thing is, you're probably not going to want to waste much of your time replying to Anonymous. It'll only encourage him/her/them and frustrate you. If you only respond to those who use an alias, you may find you waste your time much more efficiently. Thank you for sharing your stories (in whatever category)
Jenn-well written story & did fit into the LW section(not exactly...my rocket launch material-but to each their own).
Your tale was nicely crafted and thought out. The postive comments show you have a fan following, so keep writing!
Great story. You warned about the content and yet 'anon' reads and then leaves stupid comments. Dumb!
Why did`nt you mention it would have Gay men contents when the story was about Loving wife ?
What a wonderful story and great commentary on what a marriage could be with true care and concern for each other. 5 Star Favorite!
Bisexuality is normal!
You developed a situation in which it occurs normally. Your descriptions are delicate but definite, accurate , and exciting.
Hopefully Jim and Holly can find more like Mike.
I thoroughly enjoyed the pace of your development and the interpersonal responses. Well done, I will look for more.
Gay into loving wives gets you a 1
I gave a 3 for fairly good writing. But it is my opinion this really belongs in another category. The biggest problem I had with this story was the lack of adequate development of Jim, the husband. It seemed that suddenly he was not only OK with being cuckolded, but OK with performing a gay act (sucking another man's cock). I don't recall seeing anything in the introductory paragraphs that suggested he would be interested in doing something like that.
Now maybe he saw how much it turned his wife on, and maybe he got into it, or maybe she slipped some date rape stuff (Rohypnol or whatever) into his wine, but apparently he found himself excited despite his misgivings. Normally a couple discusses kinky things before they happen. I could see such a scene going dreadfully wrong, which actually seems more likely if the details are not worked out first.
If she found on his browser history that Jim regularly visited websites depicting cuckolding and men going down on other men, that's one thing. But it was never foreshadowed in the story. So there is a credibility issue here. Usually, a man who is straight needs some real coercion to perform a homosexual act -- that means Fem Dom, Bondage, or a desire to realize a fantasy of the wife doing something similar with a female partner in a FMF scene. Thanks for writing.
No guy would ever allow that to happen. No "wife" would ever pull that shit unless she didn't care about her marriage to begin with. Another wimp husband story taking up valuable space.
Found it well written and interesting the way you developed it.
For the life of me I don't know why there isn't a bi catagory, I posted on this in the forums. As for putting it in loving wives I don't see a problem, although you should have mentioned man on man action in your intro because it is possible to have a mfm without this.
I normally write in transgender and this story would have been well accepted there except that there is no transgender element. Like I said there really should be a bi catagory.
That was a perfect story. It was believable. It is just what I want for my wife and I.
Pleas continue this story
In fact, I would never have considered such a fantasy until reading your story. I disagree with the other comment calling Jim gay. More like caught up in the moment. No different than a guy being turned on by his wife with a woman, doesn't mean she's a lesbian.
still find it strange that there are those who have such a need to apply labels to people for behaviors. They label the husband gay because he has sexual contact ONCE with a man? That's about as accurate as calling a man a Ford because he's standing in a garage!
The story is interesting and enjoyable. Thanks.
Fantastic. I'd have loved to read more about him filling your wife's pussy with cum and you eating his creampie. I'd also enjoy reading about him cumming deep in your ass while your wife watched him piston in and out of you...all the while she was jerking you into her hand.
But its a lot closer to gay and cockold than I would ever get. real turn off, no thanks.
Nicely written, there is plenty of what readers come to Literotica for. I be sure to look for more of your material.
YOUR SPIN AND TAKE ON STORY LINES IS NEW, DIFFERENT AND WITH A TWIST ON PERSONALITIES. GRAMMAR IS GOOD. QUESTION? IN THE PICTURE ON YOUR BIO-BLOG, WHAT IS THE BLACK RECTANGULAR ON YOUR RIGHT SIDE BY YOUR HEAD AND EAR. KEEP WRITING. TK U MLJ LV NV
I have had maybe three times with another man's cock and I always have been the top not because I am so big but I start out giving head but they always end up sucking me off. I would love to have this experience and be the husband and have Mike's cock slip out of my wife and into my mouth...So hot just the thought of the surprise it would bring to be sucking a cock right out of my wife's pussy...HOT
Wife and I love to play this way..she knows I love her pussy, but like man play too. She is a woman that prefers MMF rather than the porn norm of FFM... I like it that way too
Keep writing.....I have one story here with some similiar elements you migh enjoy it
This story turned me on
What a perfect evening. Everyone pushes their personal envelope a little, and feels good doing it. Thanks!
I tried writing one fictional story on Lit, and received a small flood of vicious comments, similar to the ones on here, that made me reconsider the wisdom of allowing any. Oddly, I got one piece of private feedback, and it was very positive, so that's the route I'm going to take if and when I ever get motivated to write another.
I mean...this is supposed to be fun, right?, rather than a battle of insults.
Freedom of speech, unfortunately, allows some angry, anonymous self-important people to insult authors, not with constructive criticism, but with holier than thou criticism.
This is a porn site for crying out loud, if they don't like what they read, they shouldn't read it. Just ignore those hypocrites and write what pleases you. If they don't like the subject matter they don't have to read it just as I ignore subject matter I don't like.
very good story, please keep writing more stories like this one.
Jenn, this may be your best yet. I loved it. Looks like you came a long way from "Did She ot Didn't She?" Looks like she did. Loved it!
Women who go both ways are valued by men for the obvious reason - the hoped for "two-fer." Why should it work the other way around? Why shouldn't a woman want a man willing to go both ways for her? I think women are better suited for managing multiple partners than men. And once you have more than two people in the bedroom, why shouldn't they ALL have some fun?
and want to be cucks saw the "3some 2 guys and a girl" and said booyah! Ninety-nine percent of the closet cucks bashing stories are closet gay as well so 2 birds with 1 stone, write on
I have done this with a friendly couple, it was sensational and so was the creampie.
Very well written, rather similar circumstances to a recent night with my girlfriend and our new lover.
I'd love to suck my wife off her lover, but not happened yet!
Wow, you had me hard all the way through! I just love to suck our friend when his cock is coated with my girlfriend's juices!
and the gay cucks are out ingforce
More please, I loved it. Hope you fed your hubby the load he deposited in your pussy too!
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