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A Lifetime of Revenge

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by chytown05/27/11

Good Read.

Short and interesting. Thanks I am looking forward to your next story.

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by hawkeye000705/27/11

Revenge

The wife in this story was truly evil. Her torment (karma) goes on and on. I loved it.

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by Kirkel05/27/11

I'm not really sure

What to think.

It was kinda good but I feel dirty just reading it.

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by BigJohn60105/27/11

Well they say the best revenge is living well..........

Any life would have been better than hers.... Good story.

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by C_frommn05/27/11

Loved It

Such Sweet Sorrow lol

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by Anonymous05/27/11

Karma is a bitch, she got what she deserved!

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by Rehnquist05/27/11

The biggest, unanswered question is . . .

Why the fuck did she shoot him in the first place? That's a gaping hole in the story that just picks at my thoughts over and over. If she's already left him, already got a newer, better, richer husband, then why go back and shoot her husband in his crummy little trailer home and set it ablaze? She didn't think the cops would immediately suspect her?

Also, now that she knows he's alive, wealthy, and goes by the name Mack, what's to keep her from contacting the police and having him prosecuted? Granted, it's been 38-40 years, but the statute of limitations doesn't begin to run until a reasonable person would be aware that the crime was committed. Here, his ongoing silence and active hiding while she was in jail--and is still on probation--means he's well within the statute of limitations for countless crimes, even if they can't pin the lawyer's murder on him.

So yeah, karma can be sweet, but I'm thinking his murdering, twisted revenge will now be hanging over his head for quite some time.

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by SELSTIM05/27/11

A Question of Who's Worse

A well written descriptive story but both characters are dregs of society. The only difference is he got away with murder and she didn't. Making him lower than the sludge sucked off the bottom of sceptic tanks. Just thinking of him spreading his character faults on to all of his descendants leaves the foul taste of excrement in my mouth. No, he's no hero or even someone I would care to know. However, the fact that he could deceive so many people to become associated with all of those organizations he was bragging about would make him a good presidential canidate. You're taking a murderer and thief with false ID and trying to make him look good. I guess when they say,"there is always someone better" that the reverse is also true, "there is always someone worse" but which one of them is worse? In other words, the story has no moral value.

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by Anonymous05/27/11

Let me see if I understand...

she cheated on him and he murders her lover, frames her for the murder and she spends 38 years in prison for a crime she didn't commit?

How is that justice? Not only is he worse than her, you (as the author) and her (non) deceased husband (as your creation) are enjoying her suffering and for what? An affair? How is he any better than her? IF this is his true character, then it stands to reason that she is better off without him and, indeed, her decision to kill him is justified as he is a lying, cheating, murdering thief.

I wonder if his current wife knows about his crimes? Probably not, considering he is a liar.

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by Anonymous05/27/11

@SELSTIM

I don't know about being worse per se. I tend to look at it along the lines somethign Jon Stewart said in his Daily Show, back when McCain was running against Obama. He said, " As any mad scientist ill tell you there comes a point where the elation of the monster you've created kinda dies down... usually when the creature starts FUCKING up your home."

She created what he became, simple as that.

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by tazz31705/27/11

CHOICES AND DILEMNAS

ONCE AGAIN READERS AND COMMENTERS HAVE AN AGE OLD CHOICE. IN EVERY STORY THERE ARE AT LEAST 3 CHOICES,,,YOURS, MINE, THE OBJECTIVE AND THE SUBJUCTIVE VIEWER/READER AND SOMEWHERE AMONG THE "GIGO" WHAT REALLY HAPPENS OR HAPPENED. TRUTH?, JUSTICE?, NO ONE CAN HAVE ANY DEGREE OF CERTAINITY. RADK PUTS OUT A STORY CONTROVERSIAL OR NOT, BUT IT IS A STORY AND IT IS HIS. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by StangStar0605/27/11

Your editor was right

It was a very quick but a good read,
I liked the feel of the story, and the way you write as far as the lines you use are very good. Okay there are a few things I'd like more info on. but all in all it's a good story. Great job!!

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by Anonymous05/27/11

Great story

Good read. Thanks for your work.

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by TE_Ross05/27/11

Praise for a murderer?

Let me understand this; the MURDERER comes to a bar where his ex-wife works, and then gloats at her misfortune for having spent 38 years in jail for a crime he committed.

In what demonic universe do we live in where adultery equates with murder? Under what code of perverted ethics are we supposed to believe that having committed adultery that the penalty should be death? In a universe where the Taliban prevail this might be acceptable, but in a civilized society?

You might assault your wife’s paramour but to kill him? Killing him requires special circumstances, like he raped your children or tried to kill you, something like that. Absent a good reason, the murder and imprisonment of the wife was more onerous than the adultery.

I like a good story of revenge on a cheating wife, but in order to be satisfying to me the revenge must be PROPORTIONATE to the crime. Had the husband here not taken a life himself, but merely allowed the wife to be convicted of the attempted murder, then I might have seen some justice in that…but to become a murderer himself?

I was hoping that at the end of this story the ex-wife shot the criminal in the back as he was leaving the bar. If he was this much of an asshole while they were married then perhaps she was justified in cheating on him in the first place.

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by Harryin VA05/27/11

this is just vile crap

and way over the top. It is an irrational torch the bitch story to the nth degree...on steriods.

We do not know WHY the wife felt the need to try and kill him. The fact that its was someone else in his trailer bed doesnt hide that huge plot hole.

The once Ray assumed the other guy's identity why kill the wife's lover?

Maybe he deserved it in some way. Maybe she did deserve being framed for murder.

But... WHY? why didnt Ray/now Mac ...just walk AWAY?

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by RHinSC05/27/11

Good one

I guess I am old school, when someone tries to kill me, I try and kill them back. The way you described what she went through almost made up for it. Almost. The sick friend was a good twist. I applaud you, at least your character had the balls to do Something. I get it author, I am smart enough to fill in the blanks. The character delved out a respectable punishment for the would be murderer and her new man. I think some of the others miss the fact that she tried to blow his brains out and burn him down. That is a perfect justification for murder. I did not like it, I loved it.

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by Scorpio4405/27/11

Hell of a story

I'm still not sure if I liked it or not. It did provoke some thoughts about a couple of people from my past and how I handled them... and could have handled them.

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by Pistolpackinpete05/27/11

You have....

...issues.

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by Duna05/27/11

The life is not right. Both are wicked and either of them is succesful only.
Sometimes the authors' mistake are the short prolog, here the background from the past is unknown.

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by Anonymous05/27/11

Loved it

I know the cuck lovers hate it when the man wind, so just ignore the idiots.

You dun good. Cheating bitch got what she deserved. Very nice.

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by Anonymous05/27/11

well done

A fine short story. Some posters here wish evey single detail to be fed to them, I felt you gave enough of the story away to allow readrers to fill in the blanks.

Why kill the wifes lover and not her?-you had written the wife as attempting the murder. The husbands solution was much better-a lifetime of revenge.

Dark fantasy everyone has thought about at one time or another

look forward to more

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by vietvet05/27/11

Interesting concept, but just words:

Not much thought went into this attempt. In the first place if your wife cheated on you, divorced you and remarried a lawyer, she has already taken your house, your money, your kid, and everything else and is living with her new hubby in his mansion, why in the hell does she care a whit about you and thus there is no motive for her to go to your trailer and shoot you in the head.
Now we come to the body burned beyond recognition: WOOPS DNA doesn't match yours. Now we have a dead body in your bed with a bullet in his head and it isn't you, and you aren't around. WOOPS a BOLO on you and then you sneak into your former wifes house and either choke or drug her into passing out while you but a bullet into her husbands head then place the gun into her hand. WOOPS no GSR on her hands or clothing,and chemicals in her blood, or bruises from the physical attack. WOOPS not a suspect but a victim.
Now we come to the "Secret Safe which you cant know about because its a secret, and you Mackeiver the safe and steal all of that money in the few minutes you have from the time of the gunshot and the police arriving.
Now to the bar seen: If your scenario played out and she served 38 years in MAX and you started to brag as to how you set her up, you would have a shiv shoved into your get and up into your heart, and as you laid there on that filthy floor and bled out she would call the cops and walk because of a little thing called double jeopardy (you cant be convicted for the same crime twice) and she just spent 38 years for killing you and she cant even be charged with the crime again: DUMB ASS

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by PTBzzzz05/28/11

There was no DNA testing at that time so take it easy on the author The powder residue could be accounted for by holding the gun in her hands when the trigger was pulled. The author did not mention 1, 2, 3, or how many gunshots were put into the new hubby. No mention as to how the safe was accessed, could have been armed robbery and it was opened under risk of death, then he was shot anyway. The story is about revenge, it says so in the title. If we were reporting in the newspaper or as a police report I might be more critical.
Yes there were parts that bothered me but overall the story was reasonably presented.
PTBzzzz

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by RHinSC05/28/11

Whoops Vietvet

CSI has arrived. The cops are not called every time someone shoots a firearm. Unless you live in the city limits. Many people in states across the country pay no attention to gunshots.

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by vietvet05/28/11

PTBzzzz:

The time line of the story puts it in the early 1970's and DNA testing most definitely was available and police departments were defiantly touting its advantages in solving crimes, but there is still no motive for the wife to be there.
As to GSR on the wife all you have to do is read the words. I made sure you passed out, (how we dint know), then I shot your husband in the head "THEN PUT THE GUN INTO YOUR HAND". no gray area as to how many shots were fired. Then I opened the safe. His words not mine.

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by vietvet05/28/11

WOOPS RHinSC:

CSI doesn't get called until after there is a report to the police, and you are correct, the police wouldn't be called unless you lived in the berbs where you would expect a successful lawyer to live.
You are also correct that if you don't live in the city no one would be likely to hear the shot, and they would not therefore be able to hear my dogs eating your ass if you tried to sneak around my property.

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by dad2you205/28/11

Hey guys

in the '70s most police departments did not have a CSI. The evedince was collected by the decetives on the case. I know, I grew up with a family of cops.

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by RHinSC05/28/11

vietvet...

Good points, I am not against you here. I live in the burbs also, my point is that I can walk out side and cook off a thirty rounder and no one cares, that includes all the new neighbors that have moved in over the years. It is none of my business what they do or vice versa. Privacy is respected no matter what you might be doing. And a well deserved point to dad2you2 also. :)

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by vietvet05/28/11

RH in South Carolina:

I understand that culture as I was born and raised in the south, but on the west (left) coast where I now reside, you cant even fart in your back yard without some Nancy Palosi type down wind complaining about the stink.
As far as CSI, the DNA would have been collected by the medical professional performing the autopsy, and even the cops knew about GSR, for proof all you need to do is watch an old Perry Mason rerun from the 1950's

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by oldwayne05/28/11

Just a wonderful tale!

TTB and PAPATOAD would probably love it as much as I did. Thus always to cheating assed bitches.

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by digdaddyrich05/28/11

A little on the violent side

A good storyline, different and original.

A good edit made the reading go smoothly.

Like was stated, Dead men can tell the tale.

Thanks for the read .

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by Anonymous05/28/11

Ironically, this was a "great revenge story"...

Just wish all the cheating spouses [male & female] ended up like this along with those fags like shoe-no_IQ & the clueless Wonder_No_One.

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by grogers705/28/11

So outrageous...

it's actully humorous. Fantasy of the betrayed spouse.

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by Anonymous05/28/11

Well, I'll give it stars because it's not the usual closet-case cuckold story...

But her lawyer must have been incompetent to the point it would cause a mistrial to let all the inconsistent forensic evidence go by. And given her just taking all that sexual assault in prison, she wasn't shanking people weekly, so spending 38 years in prison seems far-fetched.

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by Anonymous05/28/11

Subtle but made an impact on her. her life has sucked and his much enriched. But he gave her some specific information and should have just been vague. Liked it

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by OldHideki05/29/11

Very Good Twist.

I think it was stupid for him to show up and gloat, but then, there wouldn't be a story. Somehow, I wished he had just checked up on her, and then just left. Each of the details could have been given as she served drinks to other customers. Good flash story, anyway.

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by Anonymous05/29/11

And

then you woke up whith your sheets soiled. Not good.

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by MissouriUSA06/01/11

Good short Read!

Thanks for sharing it. It's a different twist on the revenge scenario. It starts at the ending. Not bad, not bad at all.

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by Anonymous06/29/11

There are revenge stories and then there are Revenge stories. I mean, damn, her life was... wow... just terrible.

The story could've been better though. I wish you had explored her reasoning for shooting her husband more, and I really wish you hadn't had him confess all this stuff to her. She's so bitter and hate-filled that it'd be ridiculous to think she would just let him go on with his new life without notifying the authorities.

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by hawkeye000707/21/11

Good

The bitch was well done, in fact torched.

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by tazz31708/28/11

PAYBACK IS ALWAYS MEAN

sometimes it is way over the top. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by JLRemora10/14/11

A .38 and 38 years

Some valid points were brought up about the validity of the premises. But, it's very short story...A flash story. Just how much build up can be had in such?

As for the finer points of the story's contradictory "facts"...

Think of being on one of those huge roller coasters, with all the dips, twirls, arcs, and loops, racing along at a good clip. Now, close your eyes and pretend you're a fighter pilot and enjoy.

The story was heavy with revenge and really cold, too. Over done? Yes. But, enjoyable as well.

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by Anonymous11/27/11

A great revenge story

But if she works in a shitty bar in a shitty part of town then there would be a good chance that there would be a gun under the counter in which case why didn't she murder him? She had already been tried and convicted of his murder and couldn't be retried because of double jepedy so what would she have to lose?
Anyway this was very enjoyable thank you.

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by Huedogg203/30/12

hummmm some of you thing the revenge was over the top

let me see, she was going to kill him, she did put a bullet in the head of Mack who was just lucky enough to have died on his own and some of you think he was hateful. Well I guess a cheating slut will do that to you wont it.

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by Anonymous03/30/12

huefuck got his wittle feelings hurt?

Leaving the forensics out of it (it is a revenge fantasy story and real world stuff doesn't have to apply), as a law enforcement professional I would have no problem arresting, charging, and prosecuting the son of a bitch who withheld evidence and obstructed justice. Shooting a corpse isn't murder shithead, get back to us when you get your head out of your ass. I know you are busy licking the cornholes of your butt-buddies (cuckeye, Random) but those of us who know their shit (like Rehnquist) appropriately view this a travesty and miscarriage of justice fit only to soothe the tender hurt feelings of well-cucked cowards bent on hurting women. The same kind of 'men' who 'fall down' a few times on the way to my cruiser after a 10-17 arrest.

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by tazz31703/30/12

#2 WHEN ONES FATE IS INEVITABLE as hers

just go with flow, she is already up the river. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by cantbuymy04/18/12

life is a bitch and then

your get to wear Big Wanda's ownership tattoo - love it. gave u a 5.

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by betrayedbylove04/19/12

Extreme

Wonderful. The title says it correctly. If only. One question: what happened to the son Robbie the bitch mentioned?
Ahhhh, fuck it.

HA

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by Anonymous07/13/12

Bravo!!

Excellent! =)

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by studebakerhawk10/08/12

Sorry vietvet, your timeline is off

In 1987, Florida rapist Tommie Lee Andrews became the first person in the U.S. to be convicted as a result of DNA evidence.

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