All Comments on 'Watching Parents Have Sex Ch. 01'

In the future when writing a small change will have great impact on how well the story can be read. Remove the frequent and over use of things like "word --- word", "word ... word", and the like; does nothing but waste space and lends to possible confusion.

The world of sex in the eyes of a 12 year old...................

This is so bad it's good.

A read you won't regret.

Normally I'm distracted by bad spelling and grammar, and sometimes I can, sometimes I can't, stop myself from commenting on how a writer needs to proofread or find an editor.

But this story is different. This badly written piece of erotica, likely penned by someone for whom English is his second language, nevertheless has the ring of truth - of authenticity - to it.

Missing are the pages and pages of dialogue, the "just turned 18" disclaimer, the setup of Dad having just died, or just divorced Mom, or being a bad husband and/or father; missing is the mention of Sonny's monster dick, etc. etc.

What IS in this story that I find compelling is one man's recollection of being in the same room while his parents were having sex. Thanks for making the effort to share this with us.

JUST TWO LET THESE HIDING BEHIND THERE ANON. EWE ALL SHOULD BEE VERY THANK-FULL THAT EYE DID KNOT RIGHT THIS HEAR STORY BEE-CAUSE EYE DEW KNOT USE ANY KIND OF PUNCTUATION THE ONLY THINGS INN COMMON ARE WEE BOTH USED PROPER WORD SPACING RIGHTING INN ENGLISH BTW PLZ DEW KNOT JUDGE MY SPELLING INN THIS CAUSE EWE WOOD KNOT SEA ANY SEW IF EWE REED THE STORY AGAIN IT REALLY IS SIMPLE TWO REED & THEIR-FOUR EASY TOO FOLLOW ( -: <3

EYE FOUND THIS RATHER INTERESTING..YOUR STAT SHEETS STATED;(1)"THIS USER DOES NOT HAVE ANY SUBMISSIONS YET".. CENTS EWE DEW KNOT HAVE ANY THING PUBLISHED HOW CAN EWE FIND FAULT WITH SOME ONE ELSE'S WORKS?(2) YOUR DEROGATORY & CAUSTIC REMARK ABOUT PLASTIC BAGS & RUBBERS ..DEW YOU NO THAT HIS DAD & MOTHER LEAD A VERY ACTIVE LOVE LIFE & THAT THEY BOTH SHOPPED AT WALLY WORLD.. ALL-SEW WALLY-WORLD USES PLASTIC BAGS, THEIR-FOUR HE PROBABLY DID HEAR SOMETHING SOUNDING LIKE A PLASTIC BAG OPENING..YOUR PROFILE STATES"SHY & INEXPERIENCED" SEW WHAT DEW EWE USE CONDOMS FOUR ? PROBABLY JUST TO KEEP YOUR HANDS CLEAN, ORE DEW YOU PULL THEM OVER YOUR SCULL TWO KEEP YOUR HAIR DRY?

up part 2 soon!

Don't listen to the BS about grammar - not that there isn't room for improvement, and I have the same difficulties - but DAMN that was a HOT story, can't wait for next instalment! This is similar to my "Family Road Trip". I was right there with you as you described the scene and came with the three of you. Thank you. You are going to be one of the finest writers of this genre, abet with better editing; but that is just getting the right software or learning some tricks of the trade. Email me for help, hints and resources - Oediplex@hotmail.com

LEARN TO FUCKING SPELL KID.

I'm wondering what language this story is in? Ever heard of proofreading?

Its very natural for a young man to watch his parents make love. This is the lust of creation, and its only healthy for a son to be aroused by his conception. Its important to understand that a middle aged mother still has valid sexual needs. Her cunt needs to get fucked. Sharing a hotel room with his parents, the son receives a beautiful lesson in sexual education. Such edification naturally leads to masturbation, a tradition dating back to the times of St. Eve, when family sex was practiced in the Garden.

This story is hot. I used to watch my folks and never forgot it.