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A Dinner Party

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by Anonymous

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by hjennifer9806/02/11

Great begining...

Please continue this story!!!

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by Anonymous06/03/11

cartoon

This totally lacks plot or carachter develpment and has no eroticism at all.

Use your imagination and write it!

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by Corpse_rider06/05/11

Oy! What about the dinner?

This is really a synopsis rather than a story. It has great potential, but only if the author, writes it as a story ie with scenes, dialogue and description. Otherwise reading it is like watching a film on fast forward.

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