Please continue this story!!!
This totally lacks plot or carachter develpment and has no eroticism at all. Use your imagination and write it!
This is really a synopsis rather than a story. It has great potential, but only if the author, writes it as a story ie with scenes, dialogue and description. Otherwise reading it is like watching a film on fast forward.
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Great begining...
Please continue this story!!!
cartoon
This totally lacks plot or carachter develpment and has no eroticism at all.
Use your imagination and write it!
Oy! What about the dinner?
This is really a synopsis rather than a story. It has great potential, but only if the author, writes it as a story ie with scenes, dialogue and description. Otherwise reading it is like watching a film on fast forward.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to A Dinner Party or
More submissions by angel333.