Tattoo

awesome

this story was amazing

Nice

I liked this story a lot

Nice

That was pretty well written.

Yeah, riiiiight.

In your dreams pal; juvenile BS.

Another insightful 'Anonymous' comment

Hell yes this was "in (my) dreams"! IF you had read the opening paragraph I state that it is FICTION! That implies that it IS from my dreams...imagination...any other name you come up with.

Moron.

dezurtdawg

Hope....

I just hope there are more Ch. than this one ~~ as I really liked the story but I want "more",!* please* Thank you. And yes you got a (5) and well deserved. JAG

Sweet fantasy

I can only imagine, that she never returned home to her mom and dad's house, but stayed with her brother, where he treated her as she was his wife.

Thanks for the good read.

Nice

Well written 5*

Time for mom to walk on on them

Is it possible to ask for a part 2 where the mom walk i'n pn them.


And can the mom go with Sis and get a tramp stamp put next to her ass just to piss of good old dad :)



Ps great work 5 stars

Ch 2?

Sis moves in.... Goes off BC... They get pregnant... Piss off mom & dad... F*** each other silly... Have wonderful baby (ies), & then live happily ever after!
Hhhmm... Something to think about ~ ~ Maybe?

Great Read

Enjoyed this story hope to see it expanded with additional chapters....
The story line is wide open as to what can continue to happen in the lives of this brother and sister what their parents will do when they find out about the sexual relations... Very well written, again I am looking forward to additional chapters...

So,

She goes and gets a tramp stamp but doesn't think she's a tramp.

BTW, a story where a guy has a larger than average manhood doesn't _offend_ me - but snarky hubris does. Besides, it's so damned cliche. Getting it on because a girl spies a big cock is easier than developing a relationship, I guess.

good story

hahahaha. ron having a ten inch cock. what would happen to hermione? sorry, just joking. i don't know why but i hate that guy from hp series. but seriously this was a hell of a story. i've read your other stories too. and they all are fucking hot. and yeah where is the 2nd part????

moron

seems the only moron here is DEZURTDAWG if you write fiction it has to be based on reality if it isn't it is fantasy and there is a seperate catagory for that. drag your head out of your butt and rewrite all your stories or move them to the fantasy area you haven't posted a single story that is believable. you need to leave your EGO some where else when you write and stop over compensating for your own lack.

re: anon 02.03.12

Most of the stories on this site are fantasies. Fantasies conjured up in the minds of the authors.
The fantasy heading is actually Sci Fi and Fantasy where people write stories about, umm science fiction or fantasy elements.
Get your head out of you ass and appreciate these stories for what they are. They're pure entertainment, that's it. They're not written as high literature. He's not competing with James Joyce or Ulysses.

She's an 18 year old senior, yet a boy say...

"I don't date girls in my class. Too bad you're not 2 years older." And a "30 pack" of Bud Light? WTF?

Fantasy is good and everything, but blatant idiocy is a guaranteed way to make me stop reading after a few paragraphs.

Waste of Time

Just a dick extension for the author.

wow

Amazing story, very realistic fiction, well written, and omg HOT!

Re: Anon 02.03.12 & 03.22.12

Anon 02.03.12


First off, if you are going to leave a negative comment, grow a pair and sign in. Secondly, you had better get a dictionary so that you can understand what you are talking about. Better yet, here is the definition of fiction for you.


fiction: noun
1. the class of literature comprising works of imaginative narration, especially in prose form.
2. works of this class, as novels or short stories: detective fiction.
3. something feigned, invented, or imagined; a made-up story: We've all heard the fiction of her being in delicate health.
4. the act of feigning, inventing, or imagining.
5. an imaginary thing or event, postulated for the purposes of argument or explanation.


Now that you know what fiction means, assuming you have a 1st grade education at least, If you don't like the stories or the way that they are categorized, then write your own or don't read them. No one asked you to come here and bitch because you cannot write yourself.


Anon 03.22.12


The quote is actually "Thanks but I don't date girls not in my grade. Too bad you're not two years older!" Typical high school rhetoric from a guy that thinks he is hot shit in school. Get your quotes right.


Secondly, how old are you? Budweiser sells a 30 can party case in many states and around the tournament time for baseball, football and basketball in most others. Apparently you aren't old enough to buy beer legally yet.

Tattoo

Ronald and Tracy (brother and sister), for young adolescent siblings, seem to have their heads and minds on straight and very well connecting their personage to the ground. Being a lover of incest situational stories, always appreciating and gaga over incest L-O-V-E stories, this one is very good. The characters are very attracted to each other, thoughtful and considerate of each other's feeling, though their love and committment connection seems to be in the launching stage at this time in their lives and young courtship.

The story moves along very nicely, no ups and downs caused by seedy writing nor unintelligible conversations or scene descriptions--all done very nicely, and with feelings of the writer's creating of images that bring the character's visually to connect with the reader's mind and thoughts..

As with many other reader's comments there is much more in this young sibling, sister and brother couple that could easily be expanded and explored. Each reader has their own ideas how they would manage the future lives of this fine couple; however, if the writer/author does as good a job with a sequel, Chapter 02, as with ths first series I'm confident all reader's would be pleased with the results.. . My one wish is that they get "married" and start having a couple babies.

A great magnificant story; very erotically sexy in a nice, kind and doting of each other manner. They now love, truly love, each other; that element should not be fucked up nor fucked with!

im just gona say i very much agree with bigdaddy!!

not good

just another piece of shit from the damn dawg.

Nice one

I don't have complains about this one. And please - no sequels. I learned, you have a bad habit of ruining good stories by adding "daddy-daughter" sex at the end, where should be only brother- sister. Let's leave this at this point, okay? :)

agree

I agree with the previous commentator. No more ch's or parts. I can think of at least one where siblings were doing well before you diluted the story by adding mom and dad. Ruined a great awakening of love and great sex. Same here. Ther're discovering each other and realizing their love one for the other, don't water it down by going over the top. Good story.

Damn, now I want a tattoo........

...My eyes closed as she did that, then I felt her pull off of me and kiss my tip quickly. I felt movement and before my eyes opened felt her placing her pussy right over my rock hard shaft. "No Tracy!" I cried out just before she dropped down onto me about five inches.

@@@ lol, no fucking way any brother would tell his hot ass sister no! Not even if she was drunk and he thought she might regret it in the morning!! ...that's the kick I get out of people talking about 'taking advantage' of someone when they're drunk, drunk people just do shit they would normally be too embarrassed or shy to normally do, but shit that they really WANT to do or try!! Been drunk enough times and had this conversation with enough drunk people!@@@

..my god that is so good. Oh god," I said and then suddenly began pounding her faster than I had ever pumped my shaft into any woman before. I didn't know my hips could move that fast but about two minutes later Tracy cried out gibberish as we came together again. This time I only managed four good sized ropes and then some dribbles, but neither of us complained.

@@@ ...man, to run across a girl with a pussy that tight!! I've never cum before in less than twenty minutes, and that was probably from being so wound up from her working me over before I got inside her. Usually it's more like 45 minutes, if I can cum at all. Sometimes I either just exhaust myself or my arms give out and I just call it quits till another time. A blessing and a curse :/ @@@)

"I hope so. I'd hate to feel like this and know that I hadn't gotten you off." We looked at her entrance where my cum coated cock poked out of her. "You were right, you do cum by the gallon. I'm not on the pill."

I didn't miss a beat as I gave her a quick kiss then said, "Okay, do you want a boy or a girl?"

Her face broke into the largest smile I had ever seen on it before she gave me another hug and kiss. "God I love my brother so much!" she said rapidly. "I'm just kidding you. I've been on the pill for three years now. Guess I'll find out if those things really work or not though as this is THE time of the month."

@@@ You've gotta love a girl with a good sense of humor!! Hehe. I've pulled the same one myself, I'm fixed but its fun (if you can dodge her swing!) To tell her you just knocked her up! Lol @@@

Oh sure, she was into it just like I was, but I knew that was the beers screwing with her judgment. In the morning I knew she would hate me for doing that to her. Brothers DON'T fuck their sisters!

@@@ Sure they do!! Besides, do you think she's gonna be pissed about the fuck of a lifetime? The fuck she knows deep down inside that she's never going to be able to top, and the misery of thinking of having to leave you and fuck her way through an army of dicks trying to find someone that can match you? Nah, you ain't getting rid of her!! @@@

Sooo, that was fucking awesome!! If I suspend the ten inch dick mentally (or imagine I have one, lol) then its two thumbs up for the story!! Love that the brother wasnt a goodie goodie douche going on at the whole 'but your my sister, we can't!' Pushing her away bullshit . .I hate when they're written like that, and you know brothers don't do that ;)
Thanks for writing!!!

I don't think you understand sex or how the human body works..

More!

Please write a second chapter... or more! I gave this 4 stars, it would have been 5 but they would have had to end up as a couple (actually written into the story as opposed to implied) to get that last star. While I enjoy most of your stories and some I hate very, very much the ones I do like just get to what I think of as about mid way and end, I would like to see how you would bring the story "home" as it were. Another common thread with your stories is the female saying the "I love you's" while the big cocked male lays there or keeps pumping away.....