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Breakfast

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous06/04/11

Style

Personally, I prefer stories that are written in the first person--I said, she said--rather in the third person as is this story.

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steamy

Very passionate. I love a woman who loves getting oral.

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by Anonymous06/05/11

since when

a nice short story, i am sure most of us have been there at some point and can relate,, just a small point, since when can a tongue suck?? it can lick, and caress,, and stroke across a clit, but it cant suck,,just for future reference for you

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by Corpse_rider06/07/11

What about the tea and toast?

Given the tone is fairly romantic and seductive it would benefit from a more lyrical rendering. Your choice of 2nd person narrative is a good one, and perhaps male readers will be inspired to give their loved ones such a breakfast in the morning.


To anon: Style-
This is actually written in second person.

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