A Fool Stumbles Into Love Ch. 09

This was a great story

This was wonderful. The ending with Laurie was a little quick but I understand how you need to wrap things up. Great job, keep it up.

ding! ding! ding! ding!

There are no complaints about this story. Minor flaws are seriously overshadowed by the content. Write on!!!!!

good work

you have done a damn good job. you are one of the best writes i have seen so far

Excellent Story

An Excellent story about a likeable couple. a really good job

I had a hard time

getting into the story because of the seeming unattractiveness of the characters in the opening chapters. I asked my self why I should care about these people. But I hung in there and said that if others found merit, I might too.

You did an excellent job of creating almost stand alone chapters with a summary of what had gone before at the beginning to help those reading with a separation of time between chapters. And of mixing thoughts and dialog. Don't often see that done so well.

Thank you very much for the time and effort and creativity that went into what turned out to be a very interesting story and an enjoyable read.

Wow

This story was one of the best I've read in this site. Loved it!

Totally

Ridiculous.

I don't know why I read the whole thing but I did. At times there were far too much detail in the descriptions. The character development was poor. The author developed the character one way and then later would throw that info away and just change it. Cal is stupid but brilliant, the victim of cruel jokes and derision but then everyone loved and respected him. Maureen is rich then dirt poor but spends money like she's rich and goes to an exclusive country club. Cals dad is rich and has a new big family then he's not and only has a daughter. Most of the story Maureen has no respect for Cal but she has a fairy tale love for him becasue the author said so. The list of inconsistencies goes on and on.

Unlike a lot of authors , you didn't just get to the sex and then quickly make an ending to the story. I'm not gonna sit back and nit pick about little things that could have been worked on here or there, because it was a great story. Thank you for writing it.

It was awesome...just loved it...i myself had tears...it was very touching...

Great

Outstanding!!!!!!

I liked it very much. Thanks. *****

From Chapter 2 on I had a smile throughout this story. Keep on writing!!!!

Good Sensual Story
I Liked the Series Very Much And I Had Loved It Since The Chapter 1

nice.

stayed up all night reading this story. smiled, teared up thoroughly enjoyable. thank you.

Lovely story...

I loved all of it. Very warm after the first chapter. Hard to understand why you haven't gotten more comments.




OldMarineVet

I liked it.

Hi,

I liked your story. I liked it because it was positive and uplifting, and enjoyable to read. Thanks.

Bill Williams

A well thought out story

Gotta say I enjoyed the tale. Thanks for all your efforts, 5★

Loveeeeddddddd itttttttttttt:):):):):):)

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I was picturing Sandy getting burned when her attempt to set up something embarrassing with Cal and his half sister backfired.

Sorry...

...only 5 Stars for you.

Loved your story

A see it is 2 years old, but another writer said that you get notified if somebody leaves a comment.
Apart from the "fairy tale" aspect, I can see myself at that age in the "Fool".
Thank you for sharing this and your other stories with us.

response to anon from March 2014

We get all the comments, and for my romance stories I certainly read them.

great

even if it took so long time
it is a great story
one with heartbreak , laughter and most of all love

To anon 9-14

Thanks. I really fell in love with these people.

A great story

guess it would make a great movie as well

A True Romance!

One hell of a story. I kept waiting for someone to cheat but it never happened. I was so glad. You came up with 2 people who really loved each other. It was very refreshing. My stomach did flip-flops while I read about Maureen dying. I became a little angry at the author for not letting these 2 lovers continue on.You really got me with that one. A real enjoyable and entertaining story. The only semi-bad part is now I have to go back and real all your stories with the hope that they are this good. Thank you for your writing.

A Really Great Feel Good Story.

Very good story.

All Good Things-

must come to an end. Great Story, I would have liked to have seen it continue for a few more chapters. You definitely had enough material. Three little girls, one with dark thick hair and green eyes like her mother, one blonde and blue eyes, and the youngest a precocious dark brunette with blue eyes. Pool hustling black belts at the age of ten. However, that was a rotten thing to do having us believe that Maureen died but I imagine that was your purpose. Thank you for a beautiful story.

Thoughts

I really hope you are merely expressing the views of Maureen’s character, and not your own religious views, because I frankly find them at best naïve, at worst rather disparaging of those with other beliefs.

How does he know his marrow is a match? I’m no expert, but I thought even FULL siblings aren’t necessarily a match, let alone half-siblings.

And I realize with the accident it all became moot, but just what was Sandy planning with her determination to get Laurie to the dance?

great read

3rd time I've read it. Have you thought about publishing it.

Thanks, MW

Overall Good Read

First, Re: Sandy and Laurie - I think Sandy knew Laurie was Cal's half-sister, and planned to hook them up, breaking up Cal and Maureen, and then reveal the relationship!

Second, I want to repeat my complaints about the change in Cal's finances from Ch 1 to the following chapters. In Ch 1 he was pretty much broke, suddenly he's loaded and even hiring Maureen's father.

Third, as someone said, half-siblings are NOT automatic matches; only 1/3 of FULL siblings are matches.

Religion

I have to agree with my disappointment with the religious views expressed.

I freely admit that my feelings are colored by my background:

I was raised Jewish, married a Christian, we both attend a Unitarian Universalist Church.

If I am brutally honest I call myself an Atheist, in my more sardonic moments I call myself a Militant Agnostic - I don't know and YOU don't know either!

I love it:)))

They are soo naive, but I lved it:)

Wonderful

A truly lovely story. It was even better the second time through. Thank you.

One Of The Best

Hated to see this story end...thanks for sharing.

Undecided

loved the story , enjoyed it greatly.
well written , interesting & engaging tale..
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However , i got the impression with this last chapter that the Author had got bored with the whole thing , or maybe fed up with an impatient & demanding audience.
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several plot threads / ideas . briefly touched upon , alluded to & then discarded & abandoned .. followed by a rather brusk epilogue..
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i felt this chapter was saying ..... well here are some ideas that would have filled another nine chapters ...
but either
a) i am fed up with writing these characters
or
b) can't be dealing with the hassle from demanding readers
...
so here is a quick epilogue & thankyou kindly we are done.
.......
still i loved the story & have voted 5 stars for each part

Bravo: carrying a tale this long has to be a burden to keep fresh.
You have done a marvelous job.
Only one loose end is Sandy but it is not really her story anyway so who gives a rip

Best story i ever read on this site

I was looking for a story like this and then i found this.......it took me three days to finish this and i had a great time.....cal's dream almost gave me heart attack....anyways great work carvohi and keep it up

Glad I Found This!

I thought I had read all your stuff and then I stumbled on to this. What a great story. .

Simply stunning

I was weeping like a little girl. One of the best romances 😭

Spectacular!

I enjoyed this story so very very much...it is the best story I have ever read here!!
Do you know how seldom it is that God is included in these stories??
Wow, that was so very nice...My dear ducts got a good working out :-)

Outstanding read

Outstanding read. The time flew which indicates I really got into the story. Thanks for the great story development rather than a rush to finish or titilate.