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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone06/05/11

Well, well, well

neat, a convergence. Hope they catch it. A5 -gladly.

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by butters06/05/11

so so like what you've done with this

it's like both halves of this write cast shadows of their own reality upon the other, if that makes any sense.

yes, the convergence. yes, the sensations. yes a 5

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by Desejo06/06/11

Very nice

I love the way this is set up. The second "shadow" stanza made me pause, because of the doubt expressed in "but things like that never happened" as contrasts with the feeling of the security in "basks in her warmth". But that only adds interest.

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by lorencino06/08/11

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Yes! Yes! Yes!

Exemplifies elegant simplicity.

This provides the reader with a big reward for minimal effort.

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