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by twelveoone06/07/11

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if you think about this, how would you rank it on the cliche-o-meter?
4 is what i left

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by lorencino06/08/11

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A somewhat of a bleak cliché. Poetically well crafted, with imagery that works effortlessly, the poem becomes a tyrannical disempowerment of human agency. The poet accepts meaninglessness as the inescapable human condition.

I watched his birth
a keen struggle
against a womb reluctant
to release its charge
into a world this child sought
with eager energy

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