All Comments on 'Doctor's Orders Ch. 04'

Absurd, childish, totally non-believable, uh, "dialogue". Utter crap.

Your story is ok, it's true it needs work in places, but I don't think us readers really have that much a say in it (especially cowardly anonymous) , except what feel we like, that's all. I have always thought if your going to complain leave a name. Writing books and stories isn't easy and if your going to be that critical you had better be a writer. Sorry

don't mean to ramble. Please continue write more and you'll be great, and I'm not afraid to leave my name.

Not too much forward progress, I would have thought he would be stuffing his mom full of cock by now.

Thanks for the post.

Interesting how you released CH 4 after 5. I remembered these when they first came out. Super thrilled.

Looking forward to seeing 6 if you ever do it.

In 35 years living with or near my mom, she never called me 'son'. I had a name and she never forgot it, oddly enough.

I always wonder about the authors that put foreplay at the forefront of their plot, as if that is the apogee of any sex, especially one so fraught with tension and drama as mother/son. When you take the big step into that world, it is emotional and not just something you'd do with the girl down the street...

No where near as good as the story you ripped it off from..... Measuring My Cum. by palacechief

I actually wrote a part 4 before but lost all my work, I haven't been on this site for a while and I saw that part 4 wasn't on it. So this is a rewrite of that. No I'm not copying off of "Measuring My Cum" or "Six Times a Day" or whatever the fuck you want to say I am. I thought this story up long before I read any of those stories. Also Measuring My Cum is a bit pretentious and Six Times a Day is a big waste of time. I'm not trying to prove anything, I'm just writing porn.

Claiming that any story is truly original would be pretty bold. There are similar themes among almost all of the stories on this site and that is perfectly ok. Each author hopefully brings their own flare to a story and that is what I believe we see here.

It's good work, keep it up. And I disagree with the folks telling you to hurry up and have them fuck. Far too many authors fall into that trap and it sells the story short. Take your time...

She has went about as far as she can with out fucking her son, and I think It's about time for that.

Lot of sex no love making. It's still a good read.

This is the great problem and the terrible obstacle to mutually satisfying motherfucking. It is heartbreaking that so many sons feel this way. Don't they realize that their mother is a woman, with a woman's needs between her legs? Don't they understand that they have the perfect solution to their mother's cuntal needs--it's right there, between their own legs, their big young cock and their loaded young balls. Look, guys--what your mom needs is to have her warm wet twat reamed out by a big stiff prick--your prick. Your mom needs to have her twat flooded by huge doses of creamy semen--the semen you've got sloshing around in your hot young balls. What the fuck are you waiting for? You've got the cock your mom desperately needs, your mom's got the cunt of all your boyish dreams. Just go and make that special cunt yours. Your mother's wet twat and your big stiff prick--made for each other.

I like this story but the kid is a fucking pussy. If I had a beautiful older woman who wanted to fuck me I'd do it in a hart beat, I wouldn't give a shit if she was my Mom

You have a couple of great ideas that are pretty popular with incest stories, but you ruin these by having too much action without enough character development. There should be more care in setting up the scenes and explaining how fucking a family member is a big deal to all involved. This back-and-forth, I think my mom is hot, but this is wrong, BS on the part of the son isn't very convincing, in fact, it is annoying. Such conflict needs to occur before the sex takes place not during and after. The more realism there is, the hotter the story is. I know criticism is tough, but that is how we grow as writers.

As his dad I say the only way he gets to eat her is if I can suck his cock while he licks her cunt. 4yourpleasureiam I want to jack off as they fuck jack off at their feet knowing I will get to eat all his cum from her

I was trying to give it a chance but the fact that the MC is such a pathetic whinny little bitch ruined it. The huge dick, big breasted mom and doctor I let slide and suspended belief due to it being an incest story but after four fucking pages of nothing but hand jobs and him crying and ruining away like a bitch was just too much. You had potential with this high school porno script but dragged on too much and missed out on bringing in his sisters and the mom and Dr, which I didn't bother with the last part you wrote because it would probably be just a double hand job from the Dr and mom ending in him running to his room crying into his teddy bear like a sissy. I see why you don't write any more because you never could.

dud you made me nut thanks 100% HOT

The things we must do to preserve our testicles! Another well thought out and written chapter. I look forward to reading the next. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.