All Comments on 'Abandon...'

I like this piece. An emotional & passionate poem. Although I like the simile at the end: 'Floating, like a petal on water,' I didn't think it sat well with overall mood of the piece conveyed by the choice of words; writhing, grasping, demanding, fire. 'A petal on water' conveys stillness, calm and inertia. Rework that last simile and you'll have a hot poem.

Thank you very much :) yeah, I think you're right, it just doesn't fit with the sense of urgency and need. Constructive comments are always appreciated :)