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Good So Far ...
You've caught my interest here ... please keep writing ...
I like it!
So far I like it a lot. It would be easier to read if it were in past tense...present is sometime awkward.
Loved it!!
Please continue I love it!!
Great Start...
I like it so far. Am pretty familiar with this world, and you do it justice with your tone and style.
Two suggestions.
1) have some friend (or an editor) who is a grammar nazi read over the installments and fix up the tenses - whether you choose present or past (most peoples preference).
2) I'll allow you that the circumstances or local custom may not have the kings current wife being a "queen", but she should be referred to as either a princess consort or a comtess - not both at once. The highest title is the one used.
THANK YOU!!!
I am currently working on the third installment of these series. Thank you for your suggestions, they really do make sense. Hopefully I can find an editor to help me fix this next chapter so that it'll purely be in past tense.
I see that now, it's weird to call her a Comtess and a Princess-Consort, I'll address that issue in the following chapters.
The first chapter is unexpectedly posted already, I do appreciate all your feedback so please, please, please let me know what you think of that one as well.
Much love and Happy Reading! :)
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