Love Letter

Hanging

How could you leave it hanging like that? Lol. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Nice Start

We have everything set - up including the Characters.
Now we need to see how it works out.

Really?

It was actually a rather good story, right up until the end. Oh, wait! That wasn't an end, it was a stop.
Really, either end a story, or forewarn the reader that this is merely a first chapter.

oh oh!! what a start!

Ohhh

this is going to be so good I see it now!!!

Great start can't wait for chapter 2!

Can't wait to see where this story goes! The characters are interesting right off the bat and the story is winding up to be a good read! And for the life of me I don't know why guys always say "Is it mines?"

If this is Chapter One, say so!

This doesn't qualify as a story. A story has an ending. This didn't, doesn't and for all we know, won't.

wow

this deserves 10,but sadly,i could only give you 5.you have left us at a cliffhanger.please do finish this story.

Gigi

Gigi is just an in consderate slut. Geting on my nerves already. Frost she has sex in her moms house , disrespectful. The she bring a child in all ready knowing the family can afford it, I mean really come on how hard is it to keep your legs closed. And finally , she has the nerves to sleep with her fronds brother. That. Bitch I swear if it would hav happened to me sh would b injured, pregnate or not. Over all your story is good I am sticking around to see what happens to the both and how the poor friend reacts. Even though I am probably going to be dissapointed because we all know that miracullosly Gigi is going to get out of the situation. I still can get over this. She has the nerves to say , and I will paraphrase this, " I don't know why this stuff always happens to me " well in my eyes if you wouldve keep your fucking legs closed none of this wouldn't hav happned. Now I know we are all thinking that the brother has a part in it to and I agree but it's more ticked up on the friends part. But let's get back to th brother, I feel so disgusted by ths dude because this is my bro I expect better of him honestly in real pife I probably wouldn't talk t my bro ever again because of such disrespect to me. Pssh. I will see hat happens nxt time. 5 stars becaus you are a good writer but -2 stars because your outline s so fucked up and demolished any joy that I wouldve got from this story if it were under any other circumstance , like brian not being her friends brother.

good start!

are your characters in hs or college.
just curious and keep up the great story telling.

wow

Love4Words, hate much? Anyway, I'm loving the story so far. Like the twist with Brian and Ashley being brother and sister.

Love4Words if you want to make a proper point use proper English grammar so you can sound even partially educated

Good start

Thanks for a good read. Looking forward to reading more.

it starting out good

you doing great keep it coming i cant wait for more and i wish like do two pages but its up to you anyway keepit coming real soon please

Loved it! Please keep going...

It's really a great start! Keep up the good work.

Good Start...

We need more of this to chew on, I hope that you are updating this=NOW!!!

don't stop

would love to see where this story goes

Very interesting story. Ready for more chapters to come.

*****

Five.

You look like a no ingles!

Hilarious - glad you're writing and I can't believe I missed this little gem until today. Now on to chapter 2!

Lol

The last two lines! You're devious; love it!!

Good!

I think I got excited when you mentioned Bojangles....haha!

I am intrigued

Is Giselle not on any form of birth control? It is really stupid to have unwanted pregnancy in the year 2014 with all of the forms of birth control available.

To all reading this now, IT IS NOT FINISHED, I am yet to read one finished by this author.