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by simply__me06/12/11

some thoughts

I like, but the pain line hurts a bit. Me, not the poem, so you pulled an emotion. I don't know if this a form due to the rhyming scheme (I think you used the same in the previous poem). If you get a chance, lemme know the form in a pm or here. I'll come back and check.

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by butters06/12/11

positives and negatives here

but please accept apologies for not going into detail right now as i'm ill.

the very best part of this has to be those four lines at the end, though the start's strong too. seems to miss a little in the middle by comparison.

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by tazz31706/09/12

IS THE COLA RAIN

an anagram for the acid rain. TK U MLJ LV NV

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