by Canis_Crazy
As I said not a bad start. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep going this could be a really good read. Try making your chapters longer and remember to give background and depth to your characters.
...was just fine. Plenty background and depth for the start. Longer chapters would be nice - coz you've piqued my curiosity.
:-) Good work.
It was a very enjoyable read. You did an awesome job and I'm waiting to see where you take it. The world you've constructed is quite dangerous and chilling. The heroine seems like she will definitely have her work cut out for her! Don't leave us hanging...
Need longer chapters, an editor would help with some of the disjointed flow but a good beginning.
Great development of the character. Love how this is being based on a lower level wolf and not being focused on the main alpha. Can't wait to read more..
Magnifique now that my French is exhausted, yes there are grammar and diction errors. Just like the sentence I just typed. The story is wonderful and full of potential. Keep going if the comments are being picky about the editing that usually means the story is attention getting, It is keep typing
This is the first story I've read from an Omega point of view. I am curious to see the plot develop. I look forward to more chapters from you. :0)
I wish it were a longer chapter because you've left me on the edge of my seat but this was pure perfection especially for a first submit!!!! Bravo!!! I cant wait for the next chapter!!
I think that this story is an awesome first submission. I found some of the french portions a little confusing, but i was still able to understand what was being said based on your descriptions.
I am eagerly awaiting your next chapter
That was great! - I'm catching up on reading. Can't wait to start the next chapter.
I am sick so I get to stay in bed and read again. I have been away for a couple of months. I went to my favorite stories that have been continued and was going to start reading them, when I thought I would just look up and see what was new. Yours is the first one that I have read...and I can't wait to get the the other chapters!!! I thought he was forceful enough that it didn't scare her too bad. I just love it. Thanks for writing and can't wait to see more.
A note to EVERYONE! Some asswhole on Mibba.com is using my story for themselves. Type in Omega Pride on the story search. If people can, do what ever is in your power to shut them down. I am putting this on all my stories as if it continues, I will more than likely be taking my stories off. Thank you all!
ill help out no one takes thought from others when they are rightfully theres.... ugg.
Also cant wait for the next chapter I hope its up soon
I remember starting this story when it was newer but gave up when there were no updates. I'm glad to see some new chapters since I thought this was very original for a Were story. Since I'm on a Were kick right now, I'm super excited to read a story that actually reads well, instead of sounding like another amateur. There are a few issues with past and present tenses mixing, but they don't detract much from the overall read. Sorry to hear some lame ass is bootlegging your awesome story, but hopefully that's settled or will be. Keep up the awesome writing!
Alas! This story, good as it started, hasn't been finished yet. So, if you cant stand the frustration..........bail out now! I wish I did. Sigh.
it cool to use another language but you should have translated for those of us that do not undderstand french