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ummm
we come into a different story already in progress or something?
Missed a bit!
This has come form the EMCSA website. There is a bit about reminiscing on how he discovered his ability.
I THINK that it is the same author, but I'm not sure....
An enigma, within a puzzle
Same title, same main character, but what in the hell is the connection? A paragraph at the beginning woulld have done wonders to tie the two together. As it is you have a prequel that hasn't been tied to the first chapter in any way at all.
You can't win... ;-)
This really is all one story, which is told using interleaved timelines (or flashbacks, if you prefer).
I posted the chapters separately only because the last time I posted a long story, I did it in one piece and got numerous negative comments telling me it was too long and I should have posted in parts.
My intent really is that you should start with chapter 1 and proceed in order all the way through chapter 18. (Not all of them have made it through approval as I write this.)
Apologies for the confusion,
-VS
An actual story...
...and one that doesn't spell everything out in the beginning, either. Only quibble I have is that the first chapter DOES over-explain, we don't need to know Angel and Angela are the same people out of the gate, for instance. If you ever publish this, I'd say leave as much mystery as possible in the early stages. But I understand the concern w/ confusing your readers, especially considering how most people read on the web.
Regardless, you have ME hooked.
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