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by Cleo74

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Corpse_riderCorpse_rideralmost 13 years ago
Interesting

The set up is fine, but the story would probably be more effective in 1st rather than 2nd person narrative.

The author needs to pay more careful attention to spelling:

You sigh and grab a Kleenex to whip off your cock and mile at the memory...

wipe not whip, smile not mile.

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