by perihelion
Loved the story! Wish I could get lucky enough to have that happen to me sometime!!
The making love scene-and that was making love, not sex-was great; very tender and beautiful. Really loving this story.
Loved this, as well.
In the first chapter, I thought you were a little more detailed on the feelings, which added a layer for me. In this chapter, it feels like you've skimmed over them a bit, until the paragraph that begins with "I wrapped my legs...", where again for me there's exactly the right balance of mechanics, reactions and emotions.
Like Jon and Josh, I look forward to their night together!
Such an awesome story, you built the emotions and sexual tension, it was so hot. I'd definately like to read more... a lot more!
Well, apparently Jasper wanted to fuck Josh - I can understand that. But did he have to go through all the insecurity issues for that ? He could've just come right out with it.
The sex was simply spectacular and Josh is now an initiated to a new and intense path to pleasure. I just don't believe that he will now look at Jon any differently or with more respect, than he would if he hadn't masturbated in front of him.
The only thing I noticed I didn't like was when he called his ass a pussy. Men don't have pussies. Someone says that to me my erection is going back in my pants until I find a real man with an asshole. Pussies are vaginas, vaginas are on women, women aren't my thing. Other than that one thing it was really hot. Enjoyed the embarrassment and reluctance that came with ch 1 tho. Not domination embarrassment but uncharted territory embarrassment. Hot.
Would have preferred each man dropping his façade of toughness, engaging in side-to-side 69, discovering and sharing their sexuality equally.
Outdoor sex & skinny-dipping are huge turn-ons for me! Loved the story!
But Jon’s sneaky approach to it felt a bit skeevy. Like he was architecting the whole thing in a manipulative way. Would be hard to trust someone like that. He seems so hot and doesn’t need to play games to get sex.