All Comments on 'Compulsions Ch. 03'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
why didn't he protect robin

not mature enough.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
tooo fast

its too rush for me... i think it needs more anticipation or that there is no personal conflicts... i prefer the victim to have some reluctance.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
1967 Corvette

...has no back seat.

C_frommnC_frommnover 12 years ago
Nice

Cant wait to see the Revenge .

He gets on the Superintendant and the School Board.

Plus Abby seems to be a Voyeur and should bring more girls to Mike.

dogbreath1961dogbreath1961over 12 years ago
great

please hurry and right more

Lo_PanLo_Panover 12 years ago
Unlike the rest.....

I won't say something positive about your story, nor your style. As a character, Mike is brutal, disgusting and domineering. Not in a good way either. Your character and writing isn't a turn on, it's verging on a crime.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
So...

Why didn't he just use his compulsion to save Robin's job? She even asks him, "What could you have done?" as if inviting him to do show her =/

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
1967 Corvette

Since when does a Corvette have backseats to fit four people! They are a two-seat roadster!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
@Lo_Pan Hypocritical comments

You figured that out after 3 chapters? You obviously like the story. Take your high and mighty elsewhere.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Mikes Actions

Too many women in Mikes life. That is not a critizism of your writing, just an observation. This has to collapse sometime, and I won't enjoy reading that lol.

I wanted him to turn joy away. Especially with Abby listening. :/

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
what a great friend

What a piece of shit. Mike betrayed Jim here, and let Jim naively believe that when Joy asked him for permission to fuck Mike, it meant she hadn't fucked him yet, because she knew he was Jim's best friend. So. Shitty move to say the very least.

reseter18reseter18about 9 years ago
so much throat fucking.

i guess this is your fetish but cmon man. dont you think its too much?

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Details...

Corvettes don't have back seats. Good story but that's the sort of thing that breaks the fantasy.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Now we're getting somewhere

Took a while, and while the sideline stories were entertaining, I'm looking forward to seeing what you have in store for Abby.

J

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

One moment he's dominent as fuck the next he's a fucking pussy choose one already

netgnosticnetgnosticalmost 2 years ago

Everybody seems to know that it's a '67 Corvette - but I bet the author wouldn't recognize one. If you're going to have a double date in a 'Vette, you need two 'Vettes.

Cause there's no back seat.

AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

Less throatfucking, more plot and revenge drama. Superintendent needs to get some next. No doubt her throat will be sore. As for all the women I guess that's just what Mike does. He'll take who he wants, when he wants. Most guys would in his position with that kind of power.

tomcoooltomcoool2 months ago

In total good Story. On the other hand, the Autor should at least adress Protection, a) to protect the acting people against sexually transmitting deseases and b) unwanted pregnancy.

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