All Comments on 'Embracing Chaos Ch. 03'

by Bigdenverman

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roomfor1moreroomfor1moreover 12 years ago
Good story but could be improved

Overall, I quite enjoyed the story, I feel it was good but I do feel the abrupt changes in the story prevented me from getting the most from it. Therefore, the one point I feel you could improve on would not to have the abrupt changes and make your story flow better.

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