OK, I have to admit that you totally sucked me in with the Australian angle. I wanted to see what my bad boy countryman was going to do to the pretty lady, hehe.
I gave you a 3 because I liked your start and I would like to give you a 5 if you will come back and finish up this with a complete story. Please keep writing.
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OK, I have to admit that you totally sucked me in with the Australian angle. I wanted to see what my bad boy countryman was going to do to the pretty lady, hehe.
Short, sweet and satisfying. Well done.
NICE START ON A POSSIBLY GREAT STORY
I gave you a 3 because I liked your start and I would like to give you a 5 if you will come back and finish up this with a complete story. Please keep writing.
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