Falling for Jennifer

i loved it a whole bunch.please make it a series.

Well Done !

Got me hard from the first time he saw her naked and it never stopped till the end .

A printed picture.

You are an artist that has painted an erotic masterpiece with a word processor, so finely done you can see even the finest detail in each brush stroke. Gave it a 5. Keep it up!

Series!!!

Fantastic story, well told. heres hoping for more soon.

super hot

I loved it. Your characters are brilliant. The way you've kept the tension up the entire story was magnificent and I would love to read more. Maybe we'll get lucky and you'll decide to make it into a series. Thank you for one of the most erotic reads so far.

Wow

Very good.

You are a Wordsmith!! ....... keep going with this!!

Excellent story...many try but few succeed...everything was superb...story line, hesitancy, passion, forbidden pleasure...great pace and WONDERFUL climax!!
Where to from here?? The sky is the limit....right??
Thanks!!

So Erotic

Your words make a reader feel like they are a part of this story. You MUST keep this going. It is too hot to end here.

This is your best story yet. 5*****.

Loved every sentence in this story, sooo erotic from start to finish.

5 stars ain't enough!

omg...your story is amazing. so beautifully written with vivid detaill and the prolonged desire dripping off the page (screen?).

I didn't want it to end, but boy, when it did it ended well! the emotion and passion of the final scene was the perfect creshendo for the tension and desire that had been building throughout.

I hope to read more about these close-knit siblings soon.

Real or Fiction?

Are you sure this is a story of fiction? It just seems too real -- as if you are relaying a personal experience that was so vivid, so luscious the words came gushing out.

Oh wait -- that's what good writers do and you are indeed a good writer. Loved the way you use the weather outside to define the buildup taking place inside. Great use of descriptive phrases that shed light onto the brother-sister relationship such as “the air is as thick as a wet sponge” and “the rain that everyone begged for still had not come” brings a literary sense to human relations.

Totally satisfying piece of literature.

so-so

you never say how old they are so we don't know if they are in high school, college or out of college. we would have a better understanding of them if you told us thier ages. if he was just out of high school or in a local college then we could see why he would stay even with the tension. if he was out of college then the way you wrote it it would have made more sense for him to move out so he could get away from her and the temptation

then

what happens next mom finds out then they stay together or?

omg...

i can't read anything else here. that is excellent writing, truly. i could go on with detail, as you did, but you already know. just excellent.

wow

I wish I had a sister to fuck like that, Great story, just drained my balls

wow

That was a great story and I hope to read more.

Great stuff

Very good build up and climax. You've done this before. Now we need a follow-up. Perhaps a very sexy cousin could visit....discover what they are doing ....and join in.

Even with the title being misleading...

I liked the story. Did he "fall" for Jennifer? I don't think so. Did he finally admit to his feelings for her and she admit to her feelings for him? I think so. "Falling" implies an accident. Not one of their actions was "by accident." Jenn left the bathroom door open. It wasn't an accident. Even with that semantic discord I found the story HOT and well written. Thanks.

wow!

The first seven paragraphs were one of the most effective intros to any story I have ever read. Thank You.

One More Thing . . .

I wrote earlier to express my enjoyment for your story. Then it downed on me. Why did the story end with the fuck? I mean, is that really the end of the story? You seem to care so much for your characters throughout the build up then give up on them after sex. What were they thinking? How did this change their lives? How long did this sexual relationship last? Did either one of them have a boy or girl friend? Did mom find out? And where was dad or is there a dad? Way to many unanswered questions to make this a truly fulfilling story. Now . . . if this was just part one, that’s a different story. So was this part one or, like sex for some people, once the climax is over your done?

Again, after thinking more about the story I realized that this brother-sister tale might have ended with a climax but their story certainly does not.

Like a tsunami

Just keeps building until it just flattens you...Ripe for a sequel (which I hope you consider)...Very hot...Well done...

@Scorpio

Haven't you ever heard of "Falling in Love" - no accident implied there and have you ever "Fell for someone" - no accident implied either. Yes, English is a fucked up language.

Wow

That was a pretty damn good story, but I do wish you'd make another one maybe "Falling for Jennifer 2?" I don't know but still I enjoyed reading it

Very hot story

Wow that was a very hot story!
I hope you continue with another one.
I'd love to have a sister like that.

Nicely Done

Excellent writing! I loved the details - not just the characters and their action, but even the descriptions of the clouds. And yet none of it seemed waste or unimportant - you tell a good story.

This could stand alone, or be part of a series (which you also do well) - although I suspect it is hard to maintain credibility.

I think this is your best work to date!

AWESOME

loved it,please continue

Great hot story in a category I try to avoid...

...since my morals are fractured enough. I would have called it "Drawn into my Sister" in re Scorpio's complaint. I've always found it fairly hypocritical that this category is okay but Lit won't let great authors like Stang Star even refer to a possibility of underage sex. Any way, you are a very good writer, maybe stretch your horizon's a bit in a new category?

Very sweet and loving

Erotic and yet still very warm and loving.

A simple little game that changed both of their lives forever, and for them, it was finding the perfect lover and mate. Someone that was the absolute best person to love.

Thanks for the good read

what happens next?

_Is she pregnant?

I couldn't say it any better than Rich has already said it.

Very erotic, I loved it! Thanks for just an outstanding story!

Maybe your best yet!

I thought it was outstanding! Thanks for a Five Star erotic tale!

Well done! :)

Well done! Thoroughly enjoyed this. The way you created and described that sexual tension was perfect. It didnt drag on, and it didnt end too quickly. Well done!

Perfect story

You should have a lot of 5s for this. Great build-up, the tension and fulfilment were well done.

Such an elegant job of writing!

There's a paragraph in the middle of page 2 that starts 'Even though I couldn't touch her intimately...' that is a beautiful expression of the awakening of love. I cite that passage, but actually the entire story is very well crafted. A very masterful job!

Absotively Posolutely Fantabuluosly Splendiforus !!!

I loved it!!! That was HOT! HOT! HOT!

5-star story

Very good. Just one question for donrico. Is splindiforus a word?

What I missed.

Love your work, it really sang to me. Wish my three sisters had come across like that, but then I was a wimp and did not let my true feeling out, thanks to the traditional aspect of sibling relationships in my day.

Too Late for me....

What a magnificent story...well crafted...dynamic tempo and a simply elegant tale on a troublesome topic. I'm now in my late 70s and supremely regret that I never considered my late sister as a potential sexual liaison. If only we could relive certain aspects of our lives. But your written offering will serve to bring me vicarious pleasure of an event that never happened to me. I think that for me it is less of the sex and more of the intense intimacy that would have propelled me into action.

The Best

That's the BEST story I've read in this field.

hot

loved the story and descriptions

Wow!

Loved the writing. Erotic, taboo, descriptive. So very hot! Wil have to read more of you stories.

Wish It We're Me

With such a HOT story like that, make's me wish I had a brother like that...

Exquisite

Very well written, loved your characters and their play. You make the reader (me) feel a part in the story. Extremely erotic, hot and taboo. Adored your creation. Will read more.

A most delicious tale.

Fine writing indeed. Thank you.

Jennifer

Wow!one of the most erotic romantic stories ever
Ok,that was fuckin awesome!Eyes the color of doves wings...Hope to hell I can use that line sometime in my life.
Hope you've got a lot more stories out there cuz I'm damn sure gonna be lookin...
Thank's!

this was terrific

you made me feel like it was my sister and i was falling in love with her

Just an incredible story. I have read several of your stories and have not found one that I did not rate 5 stars.

Fuck!

I'm barely on page 1 and this is damn good!
Taking a drink of cold water and off to read page 2.

Wow

Simply awesome

SO SO HOT!!!

very erotic...i was fully erect reading this story..