Can't You Knock First?

VERY GOOD

Keep the story going with the MOM getting together with the son and then the daughter and then both of them.
Yoy can even add the dad at a later date.

Wow. Havent logged onto Literotica for years, and this was the first story I read. Lets get mum involved as well.

very hottttt.

As someone who has had experience with his sister, this is very good. Please continue...

rewrite/editor

this needs a total rewrite and a good editor. do not post any more stories until you fix this mess and always use a good editor before posting. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR AND FINISH WHAT YOU START OR DON'T BOTHER BEGINING IN THE FIRST PLACE.

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Bleh. Lousy editing. It was bad enough that I didn't finish the story. The other mindless zombies will though. They're just as functionally illiterate.

You need an editor

I am going to echo what other people have said - "Please find and use an editor."

Wirh some editing and a bit of fleshing out this could be a much better first submission. The storyline in and of itself is intriguing, but if you plan on trying to make this a series, you really should do rewrite. I hope you follow the suggestions we've offered!

Editor!

(Please!)

They are right...

the story needs an editor. It also cries out for the story of what happens in the family in the next few days.
Lots of potential here... Up to you to make it happen.

nice one

That was a good read, cant wait for more.

Good Read!

Thank you thanks for sharing.

Mary

Get your Editor to explain who Mary is & when she joined in.

Excellent

I loved it, that was a great read. And for the question of who's mary, it's short for his sister's name i'm guessing, nicknames are always fun in story. It was excellent read and hope there is more to come like this one

Mary

get it, Marilyn, Mary, i have a friend whos named Marilyn, but everyone just calls her mari...me and he boyfriend call her Mare tho:)

Part 2, 3, 4... ?????

Great story. Really enjoyed it. I hope there are more chapters to come.

Thank you

Thank you all for your constructive criticism and interest in this story. Yes there will be a part 2 and I will be consulting an editor. The sister gets a little kinky and tries to show mom in her own rebellious ways that it was all good. Until then keep checking back.

great great great..

dont worry what the others are saying they dont know anything.. if more stories where like this i would be happy.. great story i loved it..

I hope there is a part 2 to this story if not more

Great story, nice cadence to it. I hope that there is a part 2 or more. Thanks!

Since his mom has seen his big cock fucking his sister

Perhaps she will want some of that young hard cock for herself.

It would be interesting to read about him fucking his sister and his mom.

Thanks for the read

You just couldn't resist it could you

I quit reading when you had the brother lick his sister's ass hole. Totally ruined the story for me.
Plus there's a category for this kind of story. It's called Anal. Use it. Writers need to use it for these kind of stories. I'm getting tired of this crap thrown in my face when I don't want it and am not looking for it.
The old fart.