All Comments on 'She Crawls Ch. 01'

....befitting of the subject and paced just right. The reasoning he subtly "implants" in her for her yearnings is realistic and explosive. Good writing as well.

So far it is exactly like a story I read a while back. I'm not sure if it is the same story. I hope it is an original. I think the topic is hot. I just kinda hope it stops ringing such a strong bell in my head

I thought this a marvellous start to what I'm sure will become a major story. Please continue with it, especially the 'explicit detail' you mention!

An excellent beginning - 5 *s and thanks for sharing this very promising talent with us.

As long as the following chapters really involves actual humiliation and debasement, and not just goes vanilla. Have her pieced and tattooed and try to find a reasonable explanation for her husband, also have her gang fucked in mud in an alley and photographs taken and have her begging for and allowing them to be published on the net,hoping no one she knows will see them

to what I suspect will be an outstanding story, well written and just enough to keep me on the edge of my seat with anticipation. I look forward to her humiliation and her degradation.

Don't keep me waiting to long, please

I WANT MORE!!!!! <3

Another story about a cheating 'loving wife' that should never have got married.

Outstandingly written, well paced and leading - no drawing - the reader just like the submissive ever onward to the inevitable conclusion.

...this is not loving wives...repeat...this is NOT loving wives...

I would love for this story to continue- it's moving at a perfect pace, and I'm thoroughly enjoying it. I have not met a single person in my life who didn't fantasize about having a fling outside of their relationship. It's a natural thing to do- it is healthy. We all have eyes- we all steal side glances at others. If the moral police here have an issue, read a different story.

"Lack of communication kept him in business, but it was still a very sad state of affairs...so to speak."

Stated perfectly. Spicing things up in the bedroom can be an extremely difficult thing to do. If she approaches her husband and asks him to dominate her, what will he think of her? Is she a slut? Will he think less of her because she wants this? What if he can never look at her the same way? What if asking for this ends their marriage?

Try looking at this story as a whole before you start spouting off what a horrible person this hypothetical woman might be because she's exploring a "darker" fantasy.

People are sexual beings. Accept that and let your imagination run wild- You just might :: gasps :: ENJOY YOURSELF.

Everyone agrees that this needs more :)

It just wasn't enough at all..I will be looking for the next chapter with great eagerness.

Can't wait for the next chapter.. :)

Such a hot story, if only this man was real!!! :)

I am enjoying the direction this is heading. Please continue with the story, but never lose the conflict Melissa will have between her 'good' and 'naughty' side.

Very, very good, attention to detail, I like that, adds a lot of taste to the story.

Nice build up. Good verbal foreplay. It made me want to read more. Also he seems like a knowledgeable Dom. Have not met one in real life yet. Oh well...a girl can dream.

I love the way You write! I FEEL you in the details...Yummy🙀

Shockingly short.