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All Comments on 'A Bad Boy Pays Up'

by dfrntlover

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
not bad for first story

This is not bad for a first story. Write more soon.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

you keep changing from "her" to "you"...very distracting

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Dude.

I agree with thtat guy.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

I agree, try to keep the story in one perspective you kept going from first to third.

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