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geez you don't know proper terms......
its THROW to the bed not THROUGH...that would be going THROUGH the bed not being THROWN on the bed.......get a editor or something.. nothing ruins the mood reading a story than someone who don't use the proper words or spellings.
Would have given it a 4 except the bad editing threw me
nice beginning
nice beginning to your story thus far, as for the grammar of it you'll find some people are a bit anal over it while others simply automatically change it to the correct spelling within their mind.
but anyway look forward to reading more from you and keep up the good work.
p.s. to the other peoples comments you do realise that the english language is sometimes confusing cause there are so many variations to words. so next time you comment about grammar just remember that.
romance novel level
The dominating ways of the priestess was strictly for her own pleasure, not wasting time forcing the man to go through pain. Reading about a women in charge really makes me hot. Overall a unique story and a great "quick read."
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